miles of life suddenly silenced

miles of life suddenly silenced

 

 

highway eruption

volcanic tears of regret

windshield wipers mute 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/21/17

Reviews

[APOORVA]

hard, it has just hit very hard in heart.
loved it

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Apoorva...

j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Pithy but with such impact as the metaphor leaves me idling, staring out ahead at a rain soaked windshield, number.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, John,

j.

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

Okay, Jacob, all I can say is that this is a tragically lovely piece that speaks a message to me that is totally different than the reviews I have read below ... So, if I make a fool out of myself in trying to interpret your message, please pardon me and enjoy a good laugh ... The title says it all as ones mind can almost envision the panic and fear stricken faces, hearing the hearts pounding to the urgency of an adrenaline rush that comes to an end in a horrendous concussion of metal crunching upon metal with bones and organs crushed within terrified bodies, all within a matter of seconds to leave only the quiet sound of a radiator's hissing and a tire slowing in its spinning to come to a stop as though it were an ensign announcing the end of a heart's beating ...

Life can deal us some harsh blows ... We never know when our number may be up ...

But, in the back of our minds, we live in fear that something as life shattering as what I believe I saw and described above may happen to someone we love, a wife, a daughter, a son, or a grandchild, gone in an instant of an accident that renders "miles of life suddenly silenced" with so few miles on their life's odometer, yet, for them it is over ...

I have been wrong before, so if I misread this piece, chalk it up to old age senility and always was stupid syndrome ... LOL!

A beautiful but heartbreaking piece of writing ... Scares the hell out of me to even think about such a possibility ...

Marv

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really like your insights...and there is no misreading of poetry...it belongs to the reader and he or she bring life experience and perspective into the reading...it is what you get out of it...and this really is in-depth...

j.

[Kristina Moulaison]

This is a powerful haiku. Read it over and over and over. Very nice!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Kristina.

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Regrets....sometimes they seem to pile up and even tears will not wash them away. Your shorter poems say so much, Jacob. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Lydi...

j.

[Paul Bell]

Okay so Trump pressed button. Is Mexico still there.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

interesting perspective....i like this.
thank you, Paul.

j.

[Miss Sharon]

"Windshield wipers mute." A world of life's journey in these words my friend. I hear you. ~Sharon

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Sharon.

j.

[B]

For some reason all i see is rain
Its like when all goes unwell
The sky starts to cry

I hope i am not too far off
Nice one Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

never off at all...it is how you see it, Solo...you are the reader, the words belong to you.
thank you
j.

[Helen Crutchett]

It's hard to believe how much one can get out of a structured small write as this. Well conveyed, as always my poet friend.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Helena...

j.

[Helen Crutchett]

You are welcome. Sorry I haven't had the chance to read more work of yours. These past few years I have so many interruptions in 'life', that my writing and review has been at the very bottom of my list. You have always been so kind to me and I just want to let you know how much I appreciate you :)
Helena

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Helena,
thank you...and i appreciate your visits when you can...i know how life takes chunks out of our time...i jump on here when i can...teaching 6 classes at two different colleges---we do what we can...i appreciate you, also...

j.

[Helen Crutchett]

Wow, that's great! Six classes! How wonderful for you and for your students!