unable to catch the ending

unable to catch the ending



at a frenetic pace,
we said the "Our Father"
as hallowed ashes reached for the trinity

faith a bit frayed
i mouthed the words,
stared at your picture,

imagined a big lake in the sky
you sitting, sleeping in your cirrus chair
line slid through your fingers

waiting to wake...
but the strike was only lightning
and we were soaked to the hymnal

reciting words, casting them into the wind
the clouds calmed
the prayer ended,

lure floated aimlessly
cap pulled down over your eyes
our hearts tangled in the memories

line snapped


                                   and you drifted 

further away.


erin-cilberto
3/18/17

Reviews

[Jimmy Yetts]

So cleverly worded and, yet, deeply emotional.
Metaphorically stunning; haunting loveliness.
Very high-level work, Jacob!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for the really kind review, Jimmy
j.

[B]

A prayer in the wind
The idea of setting wishes free
What if wishes live more when they are prayed for .....

I enjoyed this piece :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Solo...

j.