elements in jigsaw motion

elements in jigsaw motion

 

 

when the chemistry withers

evicts itself to hither then yon

 

i will rest against your heart,

hoping the dissolution

retains a warm solution

within my breast,

 

an agent to buffer the dissolving---

one to keep us solving

the puzzle

 

that is us.

 

 

erin-cilberto

2/22/17

Reviews

[Leslie Philibert]

Like this, especially the finely spun L1 and L2, incredibly dense wording, perfect grammar and balance that lets L2 speak for itself, and go on !

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Leslie...
j.

[emmajoy]

Excitement opens the game, makes a move or two, laying waste to the lessons early made. Maybe the science forgets its use or remembers it too keenly. ' .. I will rest against your heart, ~ hoping .. ' Guess the simple element really is to say, 'I love you' and show it with a sweetness rather than a tumble..is a basic but essential sum of the total. ' .. retains a warm solution ~ within my breast ~ an agent to buffer .. '

Perhaps? Questioned your fine words, made my own answers from what I think I suspect but - might not!!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love your insights, emma...your poetic mind always amazes me as much as your pen.
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Relationships are definitely like puzzles and the chemistry is all important. It is amazing to me how you made science seem romantic! I liked this one. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Lydi!
:)))

j.

[Drcicarlo]

Eloquently written Jacob. Our senses become fatigued after constant stimulation, so we adapt to a stronger trigger for our desires. "...an agent to buffer the dissolving---
one to keep us solving
the puzzle" Our strongest hopes are to continue the stimulation, and to savor the chemistry that connects the two.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

it's definitely what we hope for...thank you for your insights, Erica.
j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

The gloss wears off and the romance gets toned down and as we settle into acquiescence it often leads us down a path of questions. This skips along Jacob with the embedded rhymes a clever feature.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, John.
j.

[Paul Bell]

The start is always fireworks, heart beating in tandem.
Then life takes over.
Over time you may become great friends, companions. Or you become the distant person wondering what corner to turn.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, or that one....thank you, Paul...
appreciate your words,
j.

[MOON]

Love the way you mix it up and come up with poems that speaks to the heart.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Moon...appreciate you.

j.

[Ruth]

To love beyond the physical, to hold onto the hope and understanding of acceptance. Fragile in its own destiny, beautiful Jacob :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Poppy.
j.