favorite songs and other knick-knacks

 

favorite songs and other knick-knacks 

 

 

you left grief stains on my heart

a graffiti of emotions,

artwork with delusional surrealism

 

i wanted you in the painting as you were

very real, so that my tactile fingers could touch you again

could sing along with your guitar smile

 

i wanted our song to continue forever

not have you go to heaven at twenty-seven

had to be that one last cigarette

then you and the rest of the pack

dissolved into ashes

and my heart buried into them

like a phoenix with no chance to rise

 

i still remember your eyes,

the ones they said were gone

even before your last goodbye

 

you were almost like a blink in my left

eye shadow melting before it set

breaking my heart with your exit.

 

and that rose on your grave

it's the one with the designs

that look like strings

and in the sad breeze

plays easy

melodies that match the graffiti

of a lost backup singer---

 

staring at an empty mic.

and a feather on the floor of the stage.

 

 

erin-cilberto

1/14/17

Reviews

[Bare trees]

I like the last line. It leaves the connotation that the spirit flew off and left behind a memento, as a musician would with their music.

They all popped into my head from the club so I don't know who this would refer to. Perhaps not a musician at all? Perhaps so?

That's the whole idea though I guess behind poetry...to leave them guessing at times.

Nice one Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

not intentionally to leave them guessing...but you are insightful, Pale.

the age is coincidental...

thank you for insightful words,
j.

[Bare trees]

I think the word I really meant to say was ambiguous.
I gotcha though.

[andrew mitchell]

Yes the 27 club, but their legacy lives on for we only remember the good ones.This poem had a mix on reflecting on those fine musicians of our times and the loves during those times during their music.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i could see where the reader could go in this direction...and she did have that mix of poet and musician in her...age more a coincidence.
thank you, andrew.

j.