resonant angles

resonant angles

 

 

 

 

i read your affluent affectations

and my own words committed suicide by preposition

 

of, to, in and under

duress of syllable spirit

in downtrodden dunes

buried near a sea of rapture

 

i swam on the waves of your semantic genius

death by drowning 

a rush of inordinate keeping

felt my poems seeping

into small puddles of redundancy

 

cursive swirls

coming to an inert period

 

i lay splayed on deserted beach

toes full of fruitless sand

each grain an echo of vulnerability

 

i heard my name in repeated tone

and could no longer make out 

the name "poet"

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

1/13/17

Reviews

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

You always have something
Different that's what's so fascinating
About poets it's always a new adventure.

Blessings my friend

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Benita,

j.

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

You're very welcome my friend :)

[Valentine]

Thankfully we all have something different to offer the readers, hopefully we can also learn from the readings. Valentine

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh i had been reading a friend's book...Salt Lick Prayer by Lesley Brower...it's on amazon...wrote a review of it...blown away by her work...and pretty much looked at mine and wanted to burn all of it...yes, we can learn from others, that is for sure.
thank you, Kathie.

j.

[Brokensoul]

I just came across your works while reviewing a fellow poet and I was spellbound by your writing. I thing I have no right to review your writing as each piece is immaculate. All are masterpieces. I am getting inspired by you so much. Please take me under your wings and guide me to write such marvelous poetry. I beg you to give me a droplet of your ingenuity to produce at least one such poem. Take a bow Sir.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Brokensoul.

j.

[andrew mitchell]

Each and everyone has their own uniqueness and signature they bring to the table and their limitations.
I for one if I compared my work seriously I would have stopped, but its about giving it a go!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, each a signature..all different voices, unique in its own way.
thank you, andrew.
j.

[Norman 223]

Semantic genius can sometimes be akin to hubristic hyperbole. If the language says nothing, the message is lost. Poetry should still communicate, even if on a refined level.
Your metaphors may occasionally take a little unravelling Jacob, but they make sense - which makes YOU a poet.
N.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i can only hope to make some sense to my readers...thank you for your kind review, Norman.
read morei can only hope to make some sense to my readers...thank you for your kind review, Norman.

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

No no no....I will not allow you to speak of my friend this way! No redundancy in your poetry whatsoever. I fear you are your own worse critic! I gladly splash through the puddles of poetry you post! Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are kind, thank you, lydi.
j.

[Bare trees]

There is a grain of doubt in every poet and musician at some point in their lives. That grain may grow as time goes on leading to insecurities about their own talents.

Some escape this, others accept they're not as good as others.

Just to be here is where I've learned to be happy. Someday, the pen will shake in our hand and the ideas will fade for something a simple as writing a check.

From what I know of your writing, you are consistent, you've got a long way to go, and you've got plenty of ideas--leading to great poetry.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Pale,
j.

[Tony Jordan]

You ever watch the Woody Allen film 'Sweet and Lowdown' the 1999 version, Jacob?
Sean Penn's character, the second greatest guitarist (in his estimation) in the world, would faint every time he heard the number one (in his estimation) guitarist play live.
I liked Penn better as a person AND as a guitarist.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

haven't see that one, Tony...saw several of his older films but not really a big fan...i appreciate your review very much,
j.

[Tony Jordan]

Your always welcome J.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Bummer.
Comparing yourself to another poet--especially one for whom you have high regard--is bound to greatly lessen your confidence.
You're a wonderful poet, Jacob; an artist who, no doubt--by comparison--hurts the confidence of many other poets.
Great stuff, prof!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are kind, Jimmy----i always look at those with ego...and my words whether aloud or silent would say, "there is always someone who can come along and knock your block off!"
which is true, but you are right...poets are all different....not necessarily a question of better than or not as good as.

j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Obviously, your poem was meant to portray notions you understand better than most.
Again, excellent!

[Papaya]

to no longer make out the name 'poet' when you are called is like losing your identity in a way and very sad

[jacob erin-cilberto]

it is, yes.
thank you for your insight, Ana..

j.