4 lines from a thaw

4 lines from a thaw

 

 

 

snowed in by your icy demeanor

slipping on your indifferent pavement

 

even my salty tears

can not steady my heart's step.

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

1/5/17

Reviews

[Tony Jordan]

Someone has buried their feelings so deeply in ice that they are beyond redemption - certainly the saline solution of our speaker's tears (for them?) are having little effect.
This speak's of such energy that could be used to help being wasted in frustration.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love your insights, Tony..

thank you,
j.

[Desert Knave]

Wow. Love the use of the weather terms and the write is one that speaks to me on a personal level (jealous a bit of this one). Kudos. ~Jim

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Jim.

j.

[Valentine]

Jacob, love this one. Started to laugh as I read your words. Good one. Valentine

[Bacchus]

Thawing my brain from this winter freeze... Why does the lack of sunlight steal our loves? And we still have to make it through a few more months...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes we do...thank you for your words, Bacchus,

j.

[ReedWrite]

Love this!
So simple, and yet it speaks VOLUMES!
Awww, winter...you saucy wench you!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ha ha...thank you, ReedWrite...

j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Admire the poet's optimistic perspective; he might be forty lines from a thaw.
Clearly, this guy is not soon coming in out of the cold.
Excellent use of metaphors.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Jimmy...

j.