4 lines from a thaw

4 lines from a thaw

 

 

 

snowed in by your icy demeanor

slipping on your indifferent pavement

 

even my salty tears

can not steady my heart's step.

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

1/5/17

Reviews

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Emotional barriers and walls cannot always be broken- sadly they sometimes only realise when it’s too late- wonderful words🌹

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Kelly.
j.

[Norman 223]

Drifting relationships can be numbingly cold. But there is always the expectation that sometime the ice will melt. Just four lines engendering much forethought.

N.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Norman.
j.

[barleygirl]

I love the wordplay between winter & the onslaught of a fierce romantic chill. Slippery pavement, always feeling off balance, & sprinkling salt doesn't help. So many excellent & harmonious analogies packed into such a short poem!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, barleygirl.

j.

[Ted Kniffen]

How quickly the silent treatment can put us outside looking in without knowing how we got there. Good write, j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Ted.

j.

[V]

Great use of words again. Thank you for knocking me out my sleeping beauty phase. I think I really missed your awesome crafting of words too.
Your words are so relatable, it's kind of incredible how they speak to me..def a favorite.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review,

j.

[James]

Does nothing not inspire you? We didn't get a flake here so.

Hope for a quick thaw and the salty tears might keep the pavement from freezing next time.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, James...appreciate your visits and kind words.
j.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Simple truths....simply amazing! Happy Wed. Jacob! May the remainder of your week be filled with warmth and harmony.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Queenie...appreciate your words and wishes..

j.

[Bala Gorthi]

It is very true Sir, cold demeanor can freeze a heart instantly.
Those four lines have the power to melt many. They speak volumes. I wish the rocky cold heart also melts.
Thank you for sharing this..

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind words, Bala.
j.

[Papaya]

Four lines that tell it all and I hope the thaw did indeed follow for sometimes saying and accepting it is half the battle and makes way for warmth and light to enter again.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Ana.
j.

[Lyn Anderson]

I like these four lines -- and relate -- indifference, coldness, rather than hot anger, can sting far greater than anything.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

indifference is the worst...yes, hurts worse than anger...thank you, KL...
j.