heavy machinery

heavy machinery

 

 

 

crush my expression

with your bulldozer words,

there will be a complete flattening of ego

 

the remnants of the written building

containing my heart

will be obliterated

 

your deconstruction of me,

complete

and my blueprint

for new lodging

 

will lie on an otherwise deserted desk

gathering delicious dust

as you dine on what's left of me.

 

 

erin-cilberto

1/3/2017

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

The sense of being helpless as another takes action that destroys the world you attached yourself too is something I relate to Jacob. As always your descriptions are evocative and leave the reader smeared in emotive oily words that remain beyond the read.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, John...

j.

[James]

What a great analogy. Funny how someone can completely destroy us...and for some tearing us down isn't enough they have to crush the pieces until nothing is left.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so true, James...nothing left...

thank you for your words.

j.

[Paul Bell]

Not just words. Bulldozer words.
Great ending.
What's left of me is yours, pass the sauce.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Paul...

j.

[Sami Khalil]

Love lets go of our egos, it can obliterate the self for oneness and gather dust if kept not in good standing. A very powerful write on having and losing love and picking what is left...Excellent, sir...:)...........

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, Sami...

j.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome muchly. ....::::)))))

[J. J. Nightingale]

Not a victimless crime
to dismantle a life's work
Fragile hearts break
and bleed to Anemic.

Well Done..........

Jazzy

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful and very true words, Jazzy...

[J. J. Nightingale]

You are welcome jacob...............

[barleygirl]

This is intensely dramatic for you! I like it! I totally relate to this message & I can think of a few bulldozers that my life is much better without nowadays! Always love the way you stretch a metaphor to the moon & back! (((HUGS)))

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are very kind, barleygirl...

thank you for your words.
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

You apparently know a super-villain commonly referred to as "The Human Steamroller."
Gads, man, only Jimmy Hoffa has been more badly treated by "heavy equipment."
Your metaphors, Jacob, are always amazingly creative.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Jimmy Hoffa...yes...where the heck is he? and where is that love we all experience that steamrolls our heart..

thank you, Jimmy...

j.

[Moonie]

The whole piece vibrates with a subtle sinister feel...the title made me conjure up a scene from "the machinist" with Bale working and operating those intertwined wires and handling those levers and buttons...not to forget completing crushing a partner's arm, albeit by mistake...that scene right there sits so well with the entire poem....that crushing feeling of a relationship gone wrong, where the other person dissects all your words to twist them and obliterate the meaning entirely...
Favourite lines :
"gathering delicious dust
as you dine on what's left of me."

Even when taken individually, the phrase "Delicious dust" sounds so good....like showing how beautiful ageing can be, how it can ripen the essence of something...really like the phrase! :))

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, Moon's fairest...

j.

[emmajoy]

Why do some people determine what is right, what is necessity, what is beautiful or - the complete opposite.

Seems too many, usually inadequates, need to tear down others' creations or in some ways worse -, need to destroy for destruction's sake.. achieving little but warped disinterest?

Tis best to shrug, then, pen lines of such finesse, the intended loser wins the goldest of gold medals.. And, you do..

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are very kind...yes, i despise writers who just tear others down to make themselves look good...or feel good about themselves...

such tragedy with that...poets should all be as one...we need each other...

j.

[emmajoy]

(forgive. my review was a mess.. must have been tired. Hope the re.write is more 'coherent', jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i didn't think it was a mess at all, emma...

your words are insightful...and your reviews are very kind...

j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i sometimes write replies or reviews fairly quickly as my fingers can't keep up with my mind's thoughts...

so i tend to find some of my reviews sounding weird to me days after i have written them...yours are beautiful..

j.

[emmajoy]

beauty' s in the eye of the beholder.. thank goodness!

[Jon Roggie]

Flows into many types of deconstruction.
Expresses many feeling of life,
and whether it be a relationship, a job,
or life itself.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Jon.

j.