the pretender

the pretender

 

 

 

lifeless,

another shovel full of indifference

thrown on the grave

as the poet's eyes

glazed with apathy

stare at the keys

 

trying to write the epitaph

with some profound apology

to all who read his shallow words

 

wishing his tomb

to be deeper than he.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/29/16

Reviews

[Bacchus]

crap this is me for the last few months
need a new gear- where the fingers press
those keys again.
so great here.
keep them coming.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for relating and for your kind words, Bacchus.

j.

[h d e rushin]

"Men's courses will foreshadow certain ends, to which, if persevered in, they must lead. But if the courses be departed from, the ends will change. say it is thus with what you show me" "Ebenezer Scrooge.

It has always been the test of artistry that the artist creates for the mind of another artist and whomsoever wants to tag along, that's fine too. But unlike poor Ebenezer we will not ever be so magically transformed by the ghosts of either the past or the future. The greatest poetry you can ever read is that which comes straight out of the poets mouth (pen)...untouched by outside influence, political correctness, religion , sex or the duty to keep the innocent from crying. So what if no one remembers..words never die.....

beautiful poem dear brother......

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your extremely kind review, dana...

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

oh man! deceitful walls do come crumbling down ..powerful, compact, deliberate poem ..really does hit me in the chest a good one .. the brutal honesty of the "Beats" is absolutely necessary .. i see myself in that grave .. man .. its horrible! such complete and utter failure ...there is no digging deep enough is there :(( damn!
E.
ps i put this in my favorites to revisit routinely ..as a sober reminder ;}

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for sharing how you relate to this piece, and for your very kind review...

j.

[Valentine]

Another shovel of indifference, I expect many of us on here trying to be poets will not be remembered. I felt sad reading this. Valentine

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your understanding words, Kathie.

j.