gray feathers

gray feathers

 

 

once had an enormous wingspan

now merely a shortened lifespan 

and the flying is all in my mind

not the reality kind.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/29/16

Reviews

[Valentine]

Had to laugh at this write. Funny how fast those years can fly by. Need to keep flying in our minds though, can't give up. Valentine

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, and they fly by even faster as we age...you are so right, Kathie...

thank you,read moreyes, and they fly by even faster as we age...you are so right, Kathie...

thank you,
j.

[Valentine]

I loved the way you expressed this one!!!!! Kathie

[redzone]

Jacob, are you old???? hmmm if the wingspan is still wide, grey wings fly just as high as when there was a longer life span... well at least til that trickster Arthur Itis comes visiting... until then (and even after) fly Jacob, fly....

agree with Jazz Lover below, it is a novel way to describe aging... and it doesn't appear to me that you will ever go "gentle into the night"...

redzone

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Curt...yes, i am getting there...but the wings still move okay right now.

j.

[redzone]

Great, maybe if i look skyward i might see the jacob eagle flying over head as you visit your old bronx stomping grounds... im just down brooklyn way...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

if i ever got back there, i would look you up...we had family friends in Brooklyn, so spent a lot of time there...one of my exes was from Flatbush...right by there...

[KTizzle]

I thought this was a funny way of framing aging. I like how positive it is too. Aging doesn't have to confine the mind and its vibrant imagination. This poem says to me you never truly lose your wings, they just turn colors.

Lovely write.

- Jazz

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and hopefully get more striking the older we get...those colors of wisdom...

thank you, Jazz, always appreciate your visits so much.

j.

[Bala Gorthi]

With every passing year philosophy of life changes. Your short write speaks out the facts loud. " The flying is all in my mind". Beautiful, Sir.
Mind can take us any high..
Happy New Year !

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, and Happy New Year to you, also, Bala.
j.

[Relic]

"When I was young I thought of growing old
Of what my life would mean to me
Would I have followed down my chosen road
Or only wished what I could be

Mr. Mister - Kyrie Eleison Lyrics.

These are the lyrics that popped into my mind when I read this.

I've flown in my mind maybe too many times. I'm not sure if I would know the road ahead if I saw it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Tim...yes, one of the good 80's songs...

[Lydia Shutter]

The new year begins and we realize we are closer to the end of your lives than we are to the start. We can still fly in dreams though...and in poetry. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, we can, Lydi...
Happy New Year...and thanks for the visit and your words.

j.

[Inject Positivity]

What a beautiful write that speaks of the human life. Life is pretty short to do all those things that we dream of doing, but we may not do all of them but we can fly with our wings in our never ending world inside our mind.

Sincerely
Dhiman

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your visit and kind review, Dhiman...

j.

[J. J. Nightingale]

I fly in my dreams.. and dye my feathers to match
the enthusiasm and exhilaration I enjoy
In Being ....

One Of Your Best !!!!!

Jazzy

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Jazz...

j.

[J. J. Nightingale]

You are welcome !!

[andrew mitchell]

so much to do, so very little time j, the bucket list gets longer, our live's shorter indeed leaving us only to dream our dreams be it travelling or whatever .

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, andrew.

j.

[Pete]

hmm ...yes, but we hold onto cherished memories and experiences forever, if only in our heads. we can also live vicariously through others lol. “None are so old as those who have outlived enthusiasm.” - Thoreau

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, when we outlive enthusiasm we really are dead inside aren't we?
thank you, Pete.

j.