Account Closed

Account Closed

 

isn't much to say

the words have already been spent

grief pursed between lips

of empty pocketed,

shallow sweet-nothings

silenced by the immense loan

of tears that can't be paid back

no matter how small the interest

has become,

and the cold stone smiles

are like impenetrable vaults

with conundrum combinations

that can't be broken,

so just count your losses

and move on to the next

conversation,

the interest might be higher

but more affable,

and there might be opportunity

to put some emotions

into savings.

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/3/1o

Reviews

[ms. barrie]

i cannot help but echo everyone elses' sentiments upon this stunning poem....(already been said/typed) :)

incredible word-weaving, that captivates one's psyche...eloquently profound...the topic at hand is quite relateable, yet spoken with exquisite originality...

one could get lost in your words & never want to be found again. i thank you for your presence on here & for sharing your gifted pen with us all...
happiest of new year's 17"
-- barrie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are so kind, barrie...

thank you for your words...and i hope you have a happy new year, too---and keep writing because your poetry inspires me...

j.

[ms. barrie]

you're most welcome, jacob and it's i that thanks you, for your generous, supportive words...all my sincere gratitude --- i will be back very soon to once again immerse myself into your ink! :)

[Ken Simm.]

I think and have for a long time that you 'spend' your words wisely. And for that I am glad, he said selfishly. Here the sorrow and pain is palpable but the words are experienced.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Ken.

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Once words and emotions are spent, they can not be recouped. I think, though, we learn to save our emotions as we mature. We watch what we reveal due to past hurt. Good one. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words,

j.

[Ted Kniffen]

Once again, j. 'the words have already been spent', but in such a wonderfully entertaining way. Good write

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Ted...

j.

[AYVID N]

Some relationships are spent, emptied and the baggage too heavy. Too much lost to recover ground. Not worth an effort anymore...So brilliantly said...It always such an inspiration to read you. Missed your poetry!

[AYVID N]

And yes, I am glad you are not going anywhere! :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for the kind words, DIVYA...

i couldn't go anywhere, i would miss my poet friends here, and all the inspiration i get on this site...much too much.

j.

[AYVID N]

I am beginning to realize this too.

[William Liston]

I didn't exactly understand the elaborate metaphors in this piece (I rarely do) but I could feel them ... it was as if the words themselves expressed an emotion that logic couldn't capture (if that makes sense). Whenever I see that a writer has closed his or her account (without leaving a message), I alwas get an eerie feeling in my chest that I can't quite explain. It's as if the person just vanished from the Earth, and what's left of their existence only dwells in memories. Of course, I know that this isn't the case, but it feels that way. This poem evoked that same feeling. The analogies throughout resonated with me in a special way.

- William Liston

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, William...

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

You may want to close that bank. I heard through the grapevine they moved everything to a Swiss account.

You just keep rolling Jacob!

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Al..

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

brilliant says i ..simply brilliant .. some hang on and some move on :} and love goes round and round .. some sad for sure ... as we know those gone from the cafe on account of it ... one has to invest to gain interest doesn't one ?! ;) brilliant says i!
E.
ps. you gave me a scare when i read the title ..i think many would morn your loss here .. for a little while anyway ;))

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, E.
not going anywhere...this is my poetic home...

read morethank you for your kind words, E.
not going anywhere...this is my poetic home...

j.

[Valentine]

Didn't read like the words had all ready ben spent. Sounds more like you have been saving them up to use in another crafty write for all to read. Valentine

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Kathie

j.

[Michael X]

You wrap your poetry in mysterious metaphor, and that is what I like, it gets the mind going. It is your own signature style, crafty job!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Michael.

j.