the picture is crooked

the picture is crooked

 

 

 

the plaster is chipping and cracking

pieces falling to a welcoming, understanding floor

yet my heart is nailed over the secrets

behind the wall i built so many years ago

 

i can hardly remember 

why i am standing in this room

and why it was ever my favorite.

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/21/16

Reviews

[Paul Bell]

Just the picture being crooked sets the scene.
The room holds the secret.
Good or bad.
It brings you back.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Paul....appreciate your insights.
j.

[Urja Gokani]

this poem is fab and amazingly written well penned as well do keep it up !!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, cherryblossom.
j.

[KTizzle]

"the plaster is chipping and cracking
pieces falling to a welcoming, understanding floor" I love this line because a picture makes me think of memories, people of value in those memories, or a special moment captured that must fall away. The floor being understanding and welcoming makes me think it symbolizes how life and life's gravitational pull. Life welcomes and understands change and development. I loved the contrast of the picture changing to the narrator feeling stuck in his heart.

The last lines give me a sense of someone who is drowned in their secrets they can't seem see what's real anymore. Perhaps the picture can represent the narrator himself and how surface wise he is crumpling and the plaster chipping and cracking are the pieces of his life.

Agh, so much to interpret from this work, as always. Short and full of meaning. I always love your poetry.

Thanks for sharing!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind and insightful review, Jazz...

j.

[Shannon]

Well crafted. My mind flips back and forth between literal and metaphorical readings. Which I love, when both ways speak up.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, S. Mi.

j.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Because sometimes, we just know.......

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, sometimes we do....

thank you, Queenie.

j.

[gabrielle]

Sometimes we refuse to let go of things or people just because we are accustomed of having them around . I guess being overly attached to anything/anyone prevents us from moving forward.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so true, gabrielle...

thank you for your review,

j.

[Ken Simm.]

Absolutely filled with stunning lines that all go up to make for a sad but fulfilling whole. I am impressed how you can turn so few well chosen words into an achingly beautiful whole.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, Ken.

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

i worked as a carpenter/builder for 15 yrs so of course your title made me come to read ;) some things just have to be perfect .. second line is brilliant says i! the contrast between the falling apart and being welcomed is profound .. it takes an awakened heart to be so warmly adjusted to the negative ..any negative .. especially emotional pain .. your on your mark with this one jacob.. well worth the reading
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, E.
i bet you built beautiful things...especially if they are anything like your poetry.


j.

[Einstein Noodle]

you are too kind ..we did a good job .. made it right and to last .. my downfall was not charging for it ..i was always "Oh sure...we can do that ..we'll add it in for nothing" ... i paid my workers and my bills .. but that was about it .. had a lot of repeat and lasting customers tho ;))

[Shabeeh Haider]

sometimes it is better to shut off the barrage of memories associated with the past.
Having said that it is never easy to forget.
A very touching write.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Shabeeh.

j.

[Leslie Philibert]

Glad I looked a this. Jacob knows emotions are not enough. They need to be situative. A perfect example of how to get it right.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Leslie.
j.