the other side of the equator

the other side of the equator

 

 

simplicity's solstice

clouded complications whisked away

heart's vault

dusty remnants of love

 

a new sun rises

i bare my skin in ritual

you walk into my dreams again

a vision, a revision

 

edited version

the friend,

 

i still feel the value of you

but from a distance

the sun doesn't burn

it simply illuminates

 

a more common sense

of self-sustenance.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/21/16

Reviews

[Ted Kniffen]

We do tend to complicate things. Stepping over the solstice into the darkness of love's winter, waiting for a new sun to burn through the haze, but all we can do is stare at love from a distance. Good write, j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insights, Ted.

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

There are times in life we have to change our attitudes for self-preservation purposes. A one time love turns into a good friend and perhaps that is a good thing. The sun rises and brings with it a dossier of facts....ones we might have previously ignored. Your poetry consistently makes me think, Jacob. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Lydi..

j.

[Bala Gorthi]

I wish we get the vision and space in life where we can experience this phenomenon "the sun doesn't burn it simply illuminates"
Thank you for this write...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Bala

j.

[W.k.kortas]

What we would, as men, give for such illumination--and illumination, dear jacob, is your game.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, W.k.

j.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Some cosmic relationships are always from afar. I am not sure if editing fully forms the words but the burn becomes slower less painful and the love richer... more embodied.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

such insights in your review...thank you, Queenie...

j.

[KWP]

ahhh also I love this ... how long does it take to edit the first version? A timely tale of love lost and life in balance again found. Yes, we can all appreciate the sun at a distance :) X

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, KWP...
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

An altered arrangement.
Is it possible for a man and a woman--after a previous tempestuous love affair--to "merely" become friends?
If, apparently, he feels her value from a distance and "the sun doesn't burn/ it simply illuminates."
True friends is certainly infinitely superior to any degree of enemies.
Unique piece, Jacob!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Jimmy.

j.