frayed perception

frayed perception


sifting through the change
quarter quilted thoughts
threads coined in sadness

i remember her without these
but the stitching got crooked towards the end
and her mind found gaps in the lining

her love still kept me warm
even with makeshift patches
and dollar bills invested in memory

became the cash of daydreams
as the green in her pastures
began to turn with autumn's bankruptcy.


erin-cilberto
12/5/16

Reviews

[Ted Kniffen]

They slip bit by bit into the fog. We watch them go. We reach out to pull them back, but we cannot.

A beautifully written piece, j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Ted.

j.

[Alisa Js]

This sounds like a relationship that went sideways...

... and all at the wrong times...

Yikes!!

Alisa

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Alisa..

j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

You broke my freakin' heart, Fredo!
The death process begins long before final stillness.
Who has not prayed to be spared this profound indignity?--or having to witness its devastation in our loved ones.
Not a total bum-out, however, there is also great love in what you wrote.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love your reference to Godfather 2...

thank you for your words, Jimmy.

j.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Your not suppose to give away an old lady's secrets...awesome what the heck....I can't even remember my own. Kudos J !

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Queenie--
:)

[tanmay7551]

Fading love and vanishing thoughts, unspoken touch that lie within one's soul. Should we be broken, we do with no regrets, for we were there till the last ice melted. Thanks J, for sharing. Below lines were thought provoking!

but the stitching got crooked towards the end
and her mind found gaps in the lining

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, tanmay.

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

there you go ..i am a broken man once again ..over "her" :(
when a hand made quilt is not a comforter ...but a trap for hands in the linings ..i think giving it a proper throw away is OK ;)
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, E.

j.

[Andromeda Lee]

I love this poem! It is steady, and the feeling came through well. I also love the descriptions you used. They made the poem come to life, at least to me. I am no expert, but to me this seems like great work! :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really appreciate your words, Andromeda...i am glad you could connect.

j.