at the institution

at the institution

 

 

 

raining

sounds

roof

strong

tapping

can't get in

the Raven loses this time

 

i am not drowned in my own sorrow

i am drinking from it

and getting deliriously drunk on the tears

 

but they can't get inside my heart

they fall by my window

i watch them,

 

raining

sounds

roof 

strong

tapping

can't get in

 

nevermore

 

i smile,

take another belt 

now totally insane

 

the window turns white

i don't hear anything, now

 

 

except a slight flutter of wings.

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/6/16

Reviews

[Alisa Js]

Hmmm.. this one is either a great metaphor for love and life...

.. or a description of a psychotic break-down.

Either way... quite intense.

I enjoyed it.

Alisa

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Alisa...

j.

[Ted Kniffen]

I like the sound of rain on a roof. I like Poe. I like the odd beverage. I like this poem. Good write, j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Ted....

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

Well one way of getting inebriated is drinking Poe's potion. Cheers to the sorrows!

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, Cheers...we'll join him in a drink...or in his case...many...

thanks, Al.
j.

[Bacchus]

i think this is my favorite take on Poe's
Raven yet... not surprised at it's source,

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Bacchus...

j.

[Michael X]

The window opens and the flutter are the wings, the imagination has been set free. The rain and the melancholy feelings are a heightened poetic sense!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

your reply is so poetic...i like it better than the poem...thank you, Michael.
j.

[tanmay7551]

Imagination and the way you described tears, sorrows and drinking of sorrows was the highlight of this poem.

As always wits on high!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, tanmay---

j.

[BBP]

Very clever take on the Raven, or at least that's how I read it. You can almost see Poe sitting in a santiarium.

Favorites lines...
i am not drowned in my own sorrow
i am drinking from it
and getting deliriously drunk on the tears

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like your take on it...interesting...and thank you for your insights, Bev.

j.

[BBP]

Of course and sorry if I butchered your intentions but I loved it! ;)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Bev,

regardless of whatever is the inspiration for a piece i write, the only intention i ever have is for a reader to relate in some way...and you did...so that to me is success.
thanks for reading and your take.
in poetry there are no right or wrong interpretations it is how the poems speak to the readers...

j.

[BBP]

So my control freak self is learning lol

[Valentine]

You smile and take another belt...of drink from your own sorrow. I like the way you lay out the image of that. Valentine

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Kathie...

j.

[Tony Jordan]

Those ravens are very smart j.
I mean realllllly smart.
That 80's song - 'The Lunatics are taking over the asylum' was playing in the background of my mind while I read this - present company excepted lol

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Tony...:))))

[Einstein Noodle]

top notch sir! love the repeating verse ..love the Raven omen and just the right hint of wings fluttering in closing .. the breaks lead me without question ..easy read ..uncomplicated yet complex .. leaks in the roof can be positively torturous and so hard to pin point to fix ..very fine read for me!
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, E.

j.