Your scenarios are better than Stephen King mysteries, Jacob...such a pleasure to read!
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
i appreciate that Kelly...used to be a pretty big fan of his...in his old days...
thank you.<.. read morei appreciate that Kelly...used to be a pretty big fan of his...in his old days...
thank you.
ahahahah "and the bags fly free" ...i am sure she was not such a bag to begin with .. i was all caught up in this melodrama of splitting ..i see this relationship kind of doomed from the start ..as they are in some one star motel room .. love the mirror...the suitcase ... but especially this line
" ...her lipstick didn't know when to quit"
.. high expectations and passions must fall to earth eventually :( ... as this one did .. seems the poor ol' boy has suffered the ending of two at once eh!?
E.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
thank you for your words, E.
we make our own beds sometimes...and not very neatly.read morethank you for your words, E.
we make our own beds sometimes...and not very neatly.
Always say. If you play away. Make sure it's far far away. Cause when the main woman leaves your life. The structure begins to crumble.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
yes, the structure would certainly do that, wouldn't it? and we all need some structure whether we a.. read moreyes, the structure would certainly do that, wouldn't it? and we all need some structure whether we admit it or not.
I sometimes wonder whether the other woman leaves her mark like lipstick as a territorial thing or more deviously, to speed up the processes, so she is no longer the other woman but the new replacement.Impeccable Jacob Style of writing, supremo!
jacob,
How many losses do we experience in a life time? Somehow in time they are filled with something or someone new. This poem was a true memorial to loss and we need to grieve. Eventually we may understand better what the lesson needed to be from said experience. I wonder if that is where you were coming from as it is where my head was at. Well bless you sir. Kathy
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
i like where you went with this, Kathy....
a true perspective...thank you for your wo.. read morei like where you went with this, Kathy....
lol.. and the bags fly free" I love the ending! The entire poem has its own aura, you take the reader to the situation, breaking down the situation moment by moment, great work Jacob!
Lucky is that woman who can easily get out of such "scary place"...unlike other women who are real living martyrs... (:
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
yes, i know a couple of those martyrs...and unfortunately a couple could get out but won't.... .. read moreyes, i know a couple of those martyrs...and unfortunately a couple could get out but won't....
Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at a community college and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. I am here to read for inspiration from other po.. more..