verb theories

verb theories

 

 

 

 

split tenses,

past/

uneasy

 

hopeful

present/

wary

 

i love the thought of you

when it is just a thought

but shifting infinitives

 

to love

to lie

to love

to lie

 

serenity

mistrust

future

entrust

the heart to another

 

time shadows

darkness to light

and vice-versa

 

a journey through split tenses

mood shifts

belief shifts

 

in the afterlife

we might understand the semantics

correct the essay

that is love's title

 

and allow a revision

to find some composite grade

a happy medium

edited just enough

we might 

 

but this is now

and the split

keeps shifting

the thought----

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/29/16

Reviews

[Jimmy Yetts]

Exquisite word usage.
We travel myopically; necessarily, overly focused on the journey--absorbed in the doing.
Humans may not clearly see or truly live until they relive.
Of course, Jacob, there are many possible takes on this rather profound piece.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Jimmy---you remind me of the Glenn Close line in "the natural"---
"we have two lives, the one we learn from and the one we live with after that"----

[Michael X]

Each time I read this, the formula becomes clearer. Split tenses defines what is described in each of the stanzas, like a vise and a versa. love found, love lost. I like this alot!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Michael..
j.

[James]

You are really testing this History major's English skills. I guess I should to tell you that I never learned to diagram a sentence.

Relationships are a lot like a writing a paper, constantly revising and editing until, hopefully we get an "A"... I rarely give or get an "A"

So much fun Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thanks for the smile, James.

j.

[redzone]

seems like a case of what will be will be, regardless of tense or verb theories offered to explain the need to edit..

my problem with verb theories is that I find I have no future, no present and only past tense to edit.. but that past holds lots of splits shifting...

always always enjoy reading your poetry Jacob...

redzone

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Curt...

yes, a lot of splits...

j.

[tanmay7551]

When one is not self consumed and can rather look from outside with no body to capture or bind the thoughts... Then it is better time to analyze and correct anything we want.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

true true...thank you for your words tanmay.
j.

[Ruth]

Not only does this speak of understanding, and I wonder how things will look in the afterlife but I have realised your writing has a rhythm to it, both your talent of articulation with this rhythm is incredible :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Poppy...

j.

[Linda alexander]

wow! it is sad we have to complete the essay or edit it during afterlife, why our brains and hearts can not be outside and clearly readable to all, then may be we can start editing from now onwards.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

would be nice wouldn't it?

thank you, Linda...

j..