the foundation withstood

the foundation withstood

 

 

 

tremors were felt,

seismic activity, 

skin tingling

heart pounding comfortably

we brushed against the quake

 

and then the stillness returned

a regretful calm

that almost made me feel

i only imagined you.

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/25/16

Reviews

[Norman 223]

On this rollercoaster of life, we can be elated, fearful, or confused. But then we return to "nomality" (whatever that may be).
Your metaphors are so wide ranging, Jacob, that they have a significance for eveyone.
N.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Norman,

j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

When "normalcy" returns, it hardly seems possible the Great Upheaval had occurred.
But she moved you--and not all the silence on earth will ever truly convince you otherwise.
A stunning bit of work, Jacob!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, the movement feels good to have, even if it stops suddenly...it was there.
thank you, Jimmy.

j.

[Michael X]

man, this is haunting. Such a ghostly image of love. The foundation, shaken by the very thought. Always a BIG fan this free style form, keep it up!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Michael.
j.

[Ted Kniffen]

The beginning is always a tingle away form bliss...time brings a calmness that few understand as love... until it's gone.
Good write, j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Ted.

j.

[W.k.kortas]

It is, in the final analysis, the stillness we need to fear. Tightly drawn, but has all of your trademark wordplay and emotional punch.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, W.k.---

j.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Sometimes the period we shared with a lost love can feel like a lifetime ago.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Dale...they are so true.
j.

[Corset]

"thud"

[jacob erin-cilberto]

mmm, often so...in this case...there may be hope.
thank you, corset.

j.

[emmajoy]

One reads this according to thought... and mood. Reality weather, reality relationship. Whichever, there can be intense tremors; whichever they can scar the mind and more.

Gread words that leave their footprints - as ever.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

always love your replies, emma...you are thoughtful...
j.

[emmajoy]

Thought provides a warm blanket year-long, jacob!

[_mal]

This is my favourite poem of yours. It feels loaded, am reading it as good sex in a relationship that's drifting apart so I'm probably well off but even so

[jacob erin-cilberto]

interesting perspective...and you are never off...the reader reads as he or she does...poems once let go by the author belong to the reader.

thank you, _mal.

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Now that's some kind of seismic activity there, Jacob :) As long as the foundation's good...rebuilding is a possibilty.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, it is....thank you for your words, lynn....

j.