Mannequin Riding a Stone White Horse

Mannequin Riding a Stone White Horse

stolid smiles,

an edgy grin

the man has claimed his dowry 

since birth

and now is trying to deny the mark

on his heart, the mole that causes cancer

to the breath of others

a suffocating kerchief in a suit pocket

glazed eyes, no feeling

his tie is crooked,

his suit pressed to the morality

he's escaped his entire life

now a prisoner of his own circumstance

he cowers in his cell

wondering how the joke got so far out of hand

and why the only ones laughing

are choking and wheezing on 

really bad wine 

we are going to pay for through the nose.

erin-cilberto

11/9/16

Reviews

[Ken Simm.]

Stark and chilling. I especially like the subtle title and death's horse. And of course the stunning use of metaphor here also. As for the meat of the write; it works on an incredible number of levels and does leave the reader with several palable senses.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i was hoping it wouldn't be too succinct to what i was thinking about when i wrote it, so thank you for letting me know it was relatable on more than one level, Ken.

appreciate your words.

[Ted Kniffen]

j. I like the basis of this, but there wasn't much difference in the choice and we may yet choke on fine wine, if we can afford it. Good write.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

very true, Ted...we may yet.

j.

[Cassie]

Wow Jacob, your choice of words every time i read you amazes me. I particularly love this line a suffocating kerchief in a suit pocket

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Cassie.
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Brings to mind the movie, "The Candidate" from the seventies. Robert Redford wins the presidency and then says, "Now what?" Of course, that is a question we can not answer....we just have to wait and see and hope for the best. Will we pay through the nose figuratively? I certainly hope not. Well written, Jacob. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, we just have to hope for the best....but it feels pretty scary..

thank you, Lydi...

[Beccy]

I think we are the joke that got out of hand; but as ever we can't see the woods for the trees.

How long do you reckon it'll be before we finally have to pay the piper?

Beccy.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

not long.....
thank you for your words, Beccy....

[Einstein Noodle]

well ..i sure hope he doesn't cower .. nor choke ... cancers seem to take everyone by surprise ...health and healing to us all eh!? health and healing as a higher Power truly does reign ;)))
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, E.

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

This reminds me of the antithesis of your work, Rider of Day, Patty Griffin.

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Al...just waiting now to see how all this turns out...it's scary.

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

He was on 60 Minutes last night. He seemed less scary. Honey leaves to a new home this week. Damn!