fall back

fall back

 

 

 

in the frosted grip of mourning

i was one sixth of the hands

that carried you to your sleep

felt the charred scratches on my heart

 

longed for the weight to disappear

the abrasive handle of reality

stung deeper than the dark path you traveled

 

i knew there was still a smile,

even in your stillness

 

and your depleted eyes

the deeply brown pupils

 

in some strict memorial text

were still teaching me

long after we left that site

and headed back to our lives

 

existing between the bells

 

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/6/16

Reviews

[Ted Kniffen]

Too many times j. I have had the honour to carry a friend or relative and your piece describes the feeling
perfectly. It is not a thankless task, just one you wish didn't need to be performed. Good write

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Ted.

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

To act as a pall bearer for a friend.....I believe that is an act one never forgets. You can feel the handle, see the lid, and remember the wonderful friend who lies beneath it. A friend's actions and words you remember long after she is gone. A poignant beauty of a write, Jacob. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, my friend.

j.

[redzone]

it hurts deeply to lose a loved one (your mom??) to knw they are gone and no longer there with you... and it is usually the case that even after they leave up, they still are teaching us, as we remember all those lessons from the past continuing into today...

Jacob your poem is deeply felt and carries not only memories, but the sadness in your heart...

redzone

[jacob erin-cilberto]

actually my best friend back in 1984....she was only 27 years old...thank you for your kind words, Curt...

[WittyWonka]

Poignantly sad and familiar. Sadness and loss are great teachers. Beautiful poetry, Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Witty.

j.

[aLittlePain]

Deep, powerful, meaningful expression j, they never stop teaching us! Beautiful piece. R xo

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Rach.

j.