wishing for seconds

wishing for seconds

 

 

 

toc-tic toc-tic

like rewinding the reels of a flick

i toss aside today's breakfast for

yesterday's lunch

 

and find you sitting across from me

staring that sandwich smile

onto my plate

 

i take a bite and remember your strong hands

hoisting me over your head,

as i sit there wondering what kind of thoughts

you are masticating in there now

 

and eventually it really doesn't matter

 

just imagining we are seeing a similar movie

is enough.

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/6/16

Reviews

[Alfred Kukitz]

It sounds like you are in love with a female cyclop. Lucky guy!

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for the smile, Al...is actually about my recent visit with Dad at the memory care unit in Boone, NC...

[Tony Jordan]

Great image of the speedy, jerky almost un-human movements of rewinding film.
The young-un yearns to be like the parent then comes the desire to be so different and then the resignation (not in a bad way) that Apple's can only fall so far from their life-giving tree.
I enjoyed this one j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Tony...

j.

[W R Stowe]

I see an image of a time machine and I would like to enter and go back but wonder are we doomed to make the same mistakes again or would we change our future.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i would hope we could learn from the mistakes..

j.

[W R Stowe]

Yes I would hope so as well

[Ted Kniffen]

It is that thought that keeps us going back, hoping however briefly that we will find ourselves on the same page once again and be hoisted up. A good write, j. as this series has all been.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Ted, and extended visit to my page---so appreciated from a poet whose work i admire greatly..

j.

[ReedWrite]

This has such a poignant overtone...and yet, there is a sense of peace and acceptance, as well.
It's a beautiful blending of emotion and memories and acceptance of life...and the tic tocking of the clock.
Very nice!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

really kind review, ReedWrite....thank you.

j.

[barleygirl]

This is one of my favorites of yours that are reminiscent of an aging loved one. I like the way your parallel analogous observations are braided together, side by side, & nicely (unexpectedly) congruous. I get glimpses of this person-in-a-shell with glimmers of recognition.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, barleygirl

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

i miss my Dad ...
"i take a bite and remember your strong hands
hoisting me over your head,"
did that with all my children :) squealing in fright for more when i tossed them .. "masticating" rudely woke me up .. pretty visceral ..not sure i have read it in a poem before .. i imagine my Dad enjoying his game of pitch with his buddies .. pretty sure they are all there enjoying their bit of heaven
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i am sure they are, E.
thanks for relating and for your kind words,...

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

your poem gives me fine remembrances and images .. your sure welcome ..and thank you ..:)

[Ashwin Shanker]

I got a very surrealistic image in my head after reading this.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Ashan...appreciate your read and words.

j.

[WittyWonka]

Watching the slow demise of our loved ones isn't easy but you always capture those shared moments perfectly in words that move us. Yes, time is precious.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Witty,
j.

[aLittlePain]

Very touching poem, I feel that j. R xo

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Rach.
j.