Wow...loved this. So expressive, and poignant, and beautifully descriptive. These lines are perfection:
when the brittleness causes the final breakage
and the pieces pour through her memory
like tiny granules in an hour glass
"loneliness is a friend, the only one she will need". It's both scary and comforting that in the end it's just ourselves. "no more, no less". I wonder, do we put too much emphasis on life? Do we make too big of a deal out of it? In the end, it doesn't really matter, does it? At least she's smiling. I guess that is the way to go.
I think this is a beautiful ode to a woman of truth, determination, and despair. She is real...even hardened and aging...she is real and okay with death.... love the lines:
she sees time is about up
puts on a long sleeve smile
to cover up the bruised skin of sentiment
The toughest thing in the world is to watch someone wither and die.
I think because you can see it, day by day. I remember staying all day when my own mother was dying, popping out for half an hour to get a bite. Coming back to be told she had died. Thinking to myself. She done that to wind me up. Or maybe save me. Great write, Jacob.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
yes, we wonder...to wind me up or save me...thank you for sharing, Paul
There was a time that caring for old relatives is noble and considered as one of the highest expressions of love and gratitude. Unfortunately, we easily forget the things that matter.
I've seen her, many times, ticking time in a rocking chair. Long sleeve smile cover up. No one visits. She's silent in her lonely, knowing what's up. Used to work in a nursing home many years ago. Very depressing.
Your expressions are touching, whether I like it or not, I'm feeling the deep sadness of it. Amazing!
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
thank you, lynn---yes, it is not easy to view the shell of a person who once was so full of life and.. read morethank you, lynn---yes, it is not easy to view the shell of a person who once was so full of life and strength...
Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at a community college and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. I am here to read for inspiration from other po.. more..