Road Construction

Road Construction

there's relevance on an interstate

miles of time to create tire tracks on white roads

thinking is a way to travel through states of mind

and the ink in the steering wheel

splashes pavement in frolicking acceleration

and when we get to our destination

the burnt rubber rhetoric

finally gets to cool and expand

tread bare words in a rear view mirror of destiny

left in a work zone,

keyboard traffic slows down to a crawl

and i wave at the flagman

synonymously trying to find an alternate route

to get to the end of my poem.

erin-cilberto

10/28/16

Reviews

[redzone]

I am thinking as I read of cool hand Luke and the warden's famous line "what we have here is a failure to communicate"... "frolicking acceleration" and "burnt rubber rhetoric" damn sure are road blocks to critical thinking... and critical thinking is something that is definitely out of favor these days.... just follow the rhetoric to our destiny... a road block that humanity can ill afford... it won't just be the end of your poem Jacob...so where is this alternative route, I want to wave at the flagman too...

I like your thinking through the state of mind...

Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ah yes, Strother Martin.....great line...sad when Luke said it..right before he was shot to death---

i wish there was more critical thinking...try to teach my students to think outside the box...but so many are reluctant or scared to do that...

thank you for your insightful words...

j.

[redzone]

yeah it was sad to be sure... I found to that as long as he was alive all the other prisoners lived through him rather than being like hi and it was his death that gave rise to more prisoners becoming rebellious...

it may not seem or appear so now, but I think your encouragements for critical thinking will have its affects Jacob... we often are amazed at the things we inspire in others...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i am hopeful...thanks,Curt.

[barleygirl]

Very imaginative comparison between writing & travelling. Love these nice bits of word crafting: "burnt rubber rhetoric" . . . "tread bare words" . . . "alternate route to end my poem" . . . *smile* (((HUGS)))

[Monica Chen]

The ending stanza and last line were an unexpected, pleasant surprise for me as I read this poem. The transfer of metaphor, slang, and language typically associated with traffic to the act of writing a poem was particularly entertaining.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Monica...

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

and there you have it! "the end" :) the mind is such a wonderful place to travel ..with brutal honesty and courage ... and steady focus ...when Halloween is over we can peal off the masks eh!? ... i like this very simply stated poem ..i like the roads and asphalt and peeling out ... i drove through Texas once and so enjoyed the miles and miles of very little traffic .. speeding ... and singing all the way ...
...i told my Norma it may be the last time i vote if i vote at all ..then we both went and voted early and i was so glad i did ..i did vote my conscience ... and on policy only .. and i felt peace and just a twist of joy having done so :)
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for sharing that experience, E.....i love the sharing aspect of this genre...and how we all relate to what the other writes...

[Einstein Noodle]

me too jacob ..is pend my mornings here having coffee with such a varied and exciting group .. and always come away richer for it ;)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i get so much inspiration from the poets here....

[guy drori]

"Trying to find an alternate route" - I liked the line

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, guy.

j.