Road Construction

Road Construction

there's relevance on an interstate

miles of time to create tire tracks on white roads

thinking is a way to travel through states of mind

and the ink in the steering wheel

splashes pavement in frolicking acceleration

and when we get to our destination

the burnt rubber rhetoric

finally gets to cool and expand

tread bare words in a rear view mirror of destiny

left in a work zone,

keyboard traffic slows down to a crawl

and i wave at the flagman

synonymously trying to find an alternate route

to get to the end of my poem.

erin-cilberto

10/28/16

Reviews

[redzone]

I am thinking as I read of cool hand Luke and the warden's famous line "what we have here is a failure to communicate"... "frolicking acceleration" and "burnt rubber rhetoric" damn sure are road blocks to critical thinking... and critical thinking is something that is definitely out of favor these days.... just follow the rhetoric to our destiny... a road block that humanity can ill afford... it won't just be the end of your poem Jacob...so where is this alternative route, I want to wave at the flagman too...

I like your thinking through the state of mind...

Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ah yes, Strother Martin.....great line...sad when Luke said it..right before he was shot to death---

i wish there was more critical thinking...try to teach my students to think outside the box...but so many are reluctant or scared to do that...

thank you for your insightful words...

j.

[redzone]

yeah it was sad to be sure... I found to that as long as he was alive all the other prisoners lived through him rather than being like hi and it was his death that gave rise to more prisoners becoming rebellious...

it may not seem or appear so now, but I think your encouragements for critical thinking will have its affects Jacob... we often are amazed at the things we inspire in others...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i am hopeful...thanks,Curt.

[WittyWonka]

Thelma and Louise meets James Dean. Writing should never be contrived. We rarely think about destiny having a rear view mirror but it makes sense that all our work has a beginning where were first turned the ignition and stepped on the pedal. I love it when you throw the GPS out the window. Sweet poetry, Jacob!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, never contrived, just let it flow naturally and the best will find itself on the page.

thank you, Witty..

j.

[Shabeeh Haider]

The paths maybe different but the destination is the same. One day quite suddenly and without warning our poems will end.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Shabeeh...

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

Who thought I'd be riding tonight with an old friend from Writer's Cafe.

Are we there yet?

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we're getting close, Al...
thanks...

j.

[Papaya]

This reminds me of all the times I have started writing one of my story poems and it takes on a life of its own going in a direction I had not planned but is just as ok, or better.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i think better when we let our writings write themselves...that is how it is with me...i don't direct, i just follow...i am just a conduit.

j.

[Papaya]

Yes, it's like that. Like magic.

[Lorry]

There is more than one way to make a journey Jacob, as your wonderful words here attest to. There are even more ways to get to the end of a poem, but you have certainly found a unique way of getting there on a road I have never came across on a map. Wonderfully captured.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, Nemo..

j.

[Jon Roggie]

Do you wonder if we are ever finished? Seems there is always another construction zone ahead. The roads must roll. Nice one, jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Jon....yes, always another.

j.

[aLittlePain]

Hi j, what a creative piece! Brilliant metaphor, so many great lines but my favourite...

'Synonymously trying to find an alternate route'

I liked this very much. R xo

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Rach...
j.

[Jo R.]

Jacob, Such a powerful metaphor for something becoming so lacking each and every day. "Thinking is a way to travel through states of mind".....Yes! Yes! and Yes! You capture that joy possible in what can result "frolicking acceleration." Provocative and well done!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Jo...

j.

[emmajoy]

.. ''thinking is a way to travel through states of mind

Writing really is a journey which is often exhausting, trying o n the eyes, mind and all.
There are detours and pauses, overnight stops, battli ng through re.routes, frequent
bew ilderment - wondering if the will might break down. Is the effort i worth the bother? Might the destination end up a convolut ed d disappointment

You've created not on ly a poem but a means of sh owing how words can channel success or deter progre ss. ..

Truly, your knowledge of every aspect of writing is vast.. you use metaphors and thought pro cesses that.. amaze.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are very kind with your reviews and you make me feel like a poet...i appreciate you, emma...
read moreyou are very kind with your reviews and you make me feel like a poet...i appreciate you, emma...

but as i have said in the past, i cannot take much credit for what i write...i am just a conduit...i write when the words come to me...and don't feel i have much control---lucky to get to write.

j.