notes and scribbles of you

notes and scribbles of you


cerulean epitaph
from burning embers
your brown eyes rose
tinder free,
love dancing in iris lies

smoke filled promises
and third degree burns
the fulfillment of a candlelight wish
and then darkness,

a few loose guitar strings
melting with your aura
stinging me with the heat of your memory

in those blue skies
your gaze
imprinted on the soul of my heart
cold towels in my mind
placed in your stead

but i still feel you close to me
long after the flames have subsided
and the hard rain quelled the ashes

so there is no sound left
of what you were
and the edges of the picture
are singed
with your breath on my shoulder...




erin-cilberto
9/30/16

Reviews

[Jerome F Knox III pseud..]

These lines stood out for me

smoke filled promises
and third degree burns
the fulfillment of a candlelight wish
and then darkness,

Another masterpiece

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Rico...appreciate your kind words.
j.

[aLittlePain]

Exceptional j! Some memories just never leave you I think we all have those...they seem to haunt us. If I had a prize I'd give it to you j. R xo

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Rach!

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

We forget the bad parts of a relationship and leave the good parts on a pedestal. Not sure why that is....but another song comes to mind, "can it be that life was all so simple then or has time rewritten every line?" We remember the passion....and wish it had never waned. Wonderful. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

good song...and thank you for your kind words,
those memories

j.

[1VJ]

The mercury rises, even after the music ceases to play. As always, outstanding Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Paloma.

j.

[gabrielle]

Beautiful, jacob. Beautiful.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, gabrielle...

j.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Mr. Jacob erin-cilberto, Your words caught my attention, not run of the mill in description really gave me a nudge. This was just a fun and challenging peice. I liked it too much! Just edited my poem,Woods show your beauty. Hoping you give me any input you'd like to. Blessings to you. Really great work!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Kathy...

j.

[KWP]

oh if we could relive those moments in the flesh, it is a good reminder to cherish each moment, for it's the one's you truly cherish that will never be repeated ..

[jacob erin-cilberto]

like george carlin once said, "there's a moment coming, here it comes, it's almost here, aw s**t, it's gone"

yes, so fleeting...
thank you for adding your insights to make the poem matter, KWP...

j.

[Corset]

The sting of memories, bittersweet..love this one J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Corset,
j.

[Lyn Anderson]

There are some stories and memories in our lives too powerful to be completely extinguished. Even their ghosts have ghosts.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, indeed, especially in this case...this one really hurt...thanks KL...

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

What lives in scribbles are the juxtapositions of beauty, like "are singed with your breath on my shoulder" , here is a wordsmith who knows the how scribbles work best.

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are kind, Al...
thank you.

j.