season's indecision

season's indecision

my October girl

wrapped in maple colors

wardrobe of tentative sky

she sees her breath

in the breeze that can't make up its mind

and i, the shivering tree in front of her

hiding the leaves of my book of poetry

under a cold drizzle,

because i know her unsettled heart

might blow my words into flight

cause severe uncertainty

as to whether the new spring

will have her in it.

erin-cilberto

10/1/16

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

I like the way you brought your life into "Season's Indecision." I enjoyed it very much and the connection of your book's leaves and you the shivering tree. Mist are also an effect I really find intriguing. Great one erin-cilberto.........................................Kathy

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Kathy!

j.

[KWP]

and me on the flip side ... coming into spring ... standing in the winds and getting a slight warmth in my bones, it's only teasing though ...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, just enough teasing sometimes to make us fall for it...thank you, KWP...
j.

[Lyn Anderson]

Multiple layers in this one. The changing of the seasons, a "seasonal romance" -- something wanted, but not returned. Very beautiful.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Kara Lynn

j.

[Terpsichore]

As certain as autumn is the season of capricious breeze, is the uncertainty that accompanies the female of the species. But that of course, though we may seem to deny, is a vital part of the attraction and the charm.

T

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, it is T....thank you for your words.

j.

[Miss Sharon]

Beautifully written in perfect poetic prosody. I love it! ~Sharon

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Sharon....appreciate your visits and kind words.
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

I could picture the multicolored leaves flying through the air....just as words fly through the poet's psyche. In the spring, perhaps a new "leaf" will fall at your feet. The personification, metaphor, and imagery are wonderful in this one, Jacob. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Lydi.
j.

[Jerome F Knox III pseud..]

Anothet masterpiece....i really love the 3rd set of stanzas...brilliant

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Rico...

j.