October's Warning

October's warning

 

 

the chill of you

yet the thrill of you

 

icicle tongue warms to mine

together a melting

humid breeze embraced

 

we drift,

you try to be so cool

but underneath the snowfall

the ground is a soft heart

 

and we are like unaccustomed grass

pleading for the rain of love.

 

 

erin-cilberto

9/26/16

Reviews

[1VJ]

Get frisky in October, do you? :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ha ha, favorite month...

[Lydia Shutter]

The fall is always the time of year when anything can happen weather-wise. I like how you used it to describe a love affair. "icicle tongue warms to mine" what a sensual line! The weather and love....both so terribly changeable. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Lydi.
j.

[James]

October always brings a nice feeling, the first chilly nights and backyard fires. It's like the earth is confused for just a moment.
Of course, this can be about a girl, who just can't make up her mind...Is she staying? Is she going? Is she putting on the tough exterior when really there is a soft heart underneath? So many different interpretations..

I enjoyed it Jacob, as always

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your thoughts, James.

j.

[barleygirl]

I like the ongoing mention of cold & wet . . . in California especially, the last couplet is very true.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, and i know you can relate....

j.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Hmmm you know in October I feel Fiesty, ready to ride my broomstick and cause havoc. By December, I'm calm again, ready for giggles and hot cider. I love October's warning especially the third stanza!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Queenie.

j.

[Ange Faith]

Your linguistic expressions are spot on. " ..we drift, you try to be so cool....... underneath. the snowfall...the ground is a soft heart....." The case of similar function but different structures. Brilliant writing. This a great writing to learn from especially with the use of analogies.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Ange, appreciate your words.

j.

[WittyWonka]

A beautiful analogy. This is my favorite month.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

mine too, thank you, Witty..
j.

[Blue]

Made me go "aww." Love the lines "the chill of you / yet the thrill of you"

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Blue..

j.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jacob... the chill of autumn... covering the grass
with thoughts of snow... the passion of a kiss and the
melting of hearts... orchestrated with Beethoven's symphony
of forever love... truly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Pat. love Beethoven....

j.

[Jamestown]

Gosh darn it, you just had to remind me the snow here in Colorado
is right around the corner:(
Anyways another fantastic piece my friend,
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you Jamestown...

j.