Titanic Imagination

 

Titanic Imagination

 

 

 

stowaway heart,

crated in your steerage

 

the poor man's ride

aboard love's liner

 

while he writes dozens of them

hoping when they reach the next port

 

he can find his way into the first class

accommodations within the gaze of her eyes

 

blue as the perfect sea

embracing him in eddies 

of contentment

 

stowaway heart,

crated in your steerage

 

hoping to get caught

in your thoughts

 

through stealth and guile

just to be with you, awhile.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

9/24/16 

Reviews

[Ayushi Beura]

Wonderful poem, fascinating and delightful...enjoyed a lot reading this
Thanks for sharing

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Ayushi...

j.

[Papaya]

How to read this I wonder?
A grand love that ends with a big bang and broken hearts...
The classes do not matter in affairs of the heart, only the truth revealed in the eyes.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, they should not matter...that is true...but unfortunately they often do...i like your take on this one, Ana.

thank you.
j.

[andrew mitchell]

in your case Jacob all your poetic writes make it to the next port, the reader/the other poet as we read in awe at your titantic imaginations and so very well written.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ah you are so kind with your words, andrew...thank you!

j.

[WittyWonka]

The play on words is brilliant in this piece, Jacob. It is the dream of every poet that his/her words make it to that port of call once they have set course and left the safe harbour of the imagination.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Witty.

j.

[barleygirl]

I envy your ability to have a "Titanic Imagination" (these days, concerning love, mine has shrunk considerably!) . . . which you've expressed so playfully, including many stand-out analogies in the "luxury cruise" vernacular, as the narrator sets his/her hopes a'sail! *smile*

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, barleygirl!

j.

[...]

Though this may be written for a particular muse/memory/agony/loss...
It's the on going voyage of( epic) imagination through "stealth and guile" that catches the reader's eye and heart to just hang out and be with you for a while :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, lynn...appreciate your visit.

[redzone]

Titanic, another great movie and tragic love story... he painted, but you write her poetry Jacob.. for just for her thoughts for a while... I like the images you create of the voyage and the metaphor of tragedy of love in the Titanic of the poor mans love for a woman he could not really have, only in dreams ...

nothing stealthy or poor about your words Jacob...

redzone

[jacob erin-cilberto]

only i really messed this one up with typos...i appreciated your read, made me go back over it...read moreonly i really messed this one up with typos...i appreciated your read, made me go back over it...

i have revised it, and i think it is much clearer now.

thanks, Curt.