guilty pleasures

 guilty pleasures

 

 

as my knees wobbled,

your lips rewrote our language

we spoke in tongues

only the two of us could translate

even though proper inflection

was the least of our concerns---

 

there is a special implication

when breaths entwine

and hands search for new worlds

 

we kiss innocence goodbye,

as bodies graduate to new schools 

of sanction

rules are shed to the bare threads

of conscience

 

and the feeling speaks comfortably

in any articulation

 

even pantomime...

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

9/16/16

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

yes ..guilty as charged .. charges fully the batteries but the afterglow is all kinds of other shades of self flagellation (or maybe one has found true love) .. what i enjoy most are the bits of humor and tongue in cheek ...smartly done says i .. my knees wobble for different reasons these days but in the younger years the wobbling continued until my hands elbows knees feet and mind were all a-wobble ... all she had to do was get me clothes off and hold me tight ;)))))))) i like this one a lot sir! makes me smile
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, E.....glad it could give you a smile...

j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Undeniably, several levels above the concept of "doing the nasty"--though, you did virtually throw away the rule book as you eagerly kissed "innocence goodbye."
And it's pretty clear you "articulated" the hell out of each other.
I suppose, to be fair, your wobbly knees and other inexperience indicators--including possessing the innocence to kiss goodbye--label this a first-time account.
Therefore, Jacob, "guilty pleasures" starkly portrays a truly lovely recreation of your initial, shared foray into deeply carnal and wildly emotional abandonment; euphemism, admittedly, for "doing the nasty."

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thanks Jimmy,
good idea...wish it had been like this.

j.

[Abhilash Hegde]

this has a lot of oomph... expressions used are very striking and images that come through certainly tickle our senses. nice reading! thanks for sharing.. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Abhilash...

j.

[gabrielle]

I blushed at "we spoke in tongues." :) Subtle yet intense write, J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, gabrielle...

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

Sexy images here. Smart and sophisticated. Always a pleasure to read.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, KL....

j.

[V]

Great wording. This piece really drew me in, clear and balancing on the edge of innocence, so to speak.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Vanessa.

j.

[Coyote Poetry]

Those guilty pleasure. Become sweeter with time and distance. I enjoyed this poem my friend Jacob. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Coyote...
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[Carolynn]

This was a great end to my work day :) Love the way you sneak "speaking in tongues" in a rather steamy read....perhaps confessional is in order young man! haha!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

perhaps it is...ha ha.
thank you, Carolynn...

j.