So Many Miles

So Many Miles

 

 

all the cars on the lifts

survey the scene---

the others surround them with

broken axles, broken hearts

Flat tires, deflated egos

 

the war scratches

on the seams of bodies

the old creaky doors like

contrary voices speaking up

squeaking up---

 

the view from the top

 

 

they wince at the deluge of deflation

and broken down laughter

--

but are remiss in recognizing

their own blemishes---

the reason they are on the lifts--

and how their faults are exposed

for all the rest to see---

 

people on pedestals have blemishes

as well---

we all creak/scream in pain

and need restoration

repair---

 

and have an air

of vulnerability---

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

9/14/16

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Quiet and strong logic in the words my friend.
"people on pedestals have blemishes
as well---
we all creak/scream in pain
and need restoration
repair---"
No perfect person. We must accept weaknesses, as well as strength. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, my friend.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[Ange Faith]

Yes true to form. Age demands repair. None of us are without fault. But this poetry is as near to perfection as one can get!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are kind, Ange...
thank you.

[Daydreamer]

Another thought provoking creation!
I don't know why we tend irrationalize one another and assume those we choose to idolize are exempt from life's inevitable pain.
This perception of perfection without blemishes is harmful because it goes against nature,
For even the most precious gems are a bit tainted.
And it's that aspect which makes them all the more unique.

I truly appreciated this piece, it truly was a breath of fresh air.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really like your insights...thank you, Daydreamer...

j.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

I guess looking down would give a much different view than looking up. Off I go to see the view from the floor...I've been sitting at the table for too long.ty

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for the smile, Queenie.
j.

[redzone]

it's true you do allow the reader many different interpretations on this poem (and many of your poems) which is always a positive in poetry and for poets I think... and while there is in todays society deep stratifications, and because of this actually we do not ALL suffer pain or have the same pains equally... in wars the generals do not suffer as the foot soldier and civilians, etc... and even in the matter of wars of the heart (love) the pain is not equal or equally distributed between men and women...

in good poetry, real poetry, the poet sprinkles metaphor in such a way that paints a canvas with feeling and the flow of life... I think Jacob you really do get this and write it... there is no inflated ego in your words though I think your heart has been through some blown pistons and valve pings a few times.. and some of your poems are written in oil from a leaky filter... but I can't help but enjoy them..

redzone

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really appreciate your kind review, Curt.

thank you,

j.

[Daisy]

I am in total admiration of your keen sense of observation. To find the extraordinary in the ordinary and to revive the beauty of that truth so beautifully through your words is nothing more than a sheer ART!
You are one amazing artist! Thank you for this excellent write-up :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Daisy.

j.

[Beccy]

You pass a discarded tyre at the roadside. To many it it simply a worn out old piece of rubber, hardly worthy of a second thought. To the poet it has a story contained in every long mile traveled.

Wonderful writing.

Beccy.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Beccy,

j.

[Ruth]

You seem to take so many observations and reel them into a script almost, this could apply to so many things but I find with your poetry, I am taken to many places usually and enjoy spending the time meandering the possibilities :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Poppy...

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

This reminds me of the oil change with filter we all need from time to time. However, many go without either and expect the self to run smoothly forever.

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so true, Al...
thank you for your words...

j.

[Paul Bell]

So true, to have an ego is bad enough.
To have an inflated ego, i want to rule the world.
We have enough of them.
America loves its heroes.
Britain builds her heroes up, then dumps them. Quirky or what.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insights, Paul.
j.