sunburned mind

sunburned mind

the old man sinking in the marsh

has been pulled from the reeking weeds

and is sailing on a sun kissed surface

his heart finding youth again

and new memories to lose

but savor for the fleeting floating seconds

that rise to meet the bluebirds

singing in his ear,

the old eyes are smiling

and my heart is nesting

comfortably

with the knowledge his sky 

has found a rebirth of halcyon wonder.

erin-cilberto

9/11/16

Reviews

[Paul Bell]

People always mention the good old days, like that was it.
But in reality, yesterday could be that day.
Saying that, kids don't know they're born these days.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, Paul.

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

A sense of letting go, acceptance, and finding peace.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, KL.

j.

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the story in the poem leading to the good ending.
"has found a rebirth of halcyon wonder."
Very nice to find a halcyon wonder. Thank you Jacob for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Coyote...

j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Jacob.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Loved your imagery and feeling attached to it. Liked your mention of the halcyon. Very poetic and worth the read. Tyfs!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Cyprian.

j.

[W.k.kortas]

More than a touch valedictory, combined with an enviable wistfulness. This could have gotten of the rails and gone a little soppy, but folks who write this well just don't do that.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are so kind to me with your reviews, W.k.

thank you...

j.

[J. J. Nightingale]

Is this about YOU or an Old man...

I like the idea of rebirth .. and halcyon wonder...


Interesting ........

Jazz

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the latter...
thank you for your read Jazz...

and your kind comment.
read morethe latter...
thank you for your read Jazz...

and your kind comment.

j.

[J. J. Nightingale]

You are welcome Jacob.....

[Corset]

you should stay out in the sun too long more often! just kidding, you're always awesome, but I fancy this flight of wonder, it makes me mind smile :) ugh, back to work for me...keep penning my friend :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Corset.

j.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jacob... I also take refuge in the birds and their song.
A beautiful poem of nature's healing effect as we age on
life's stage. truly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Pat.

j.