First Round

First Round

 

 

heart rate spiked

like the punch

 

in the gut i felt 

when your eyes met mine

 

you were a knockout,

and i gladly met the canvas

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

9/11/16

Reviews

[Alfred Kukitz]

I'll be counting to infinity, ten seems to short. I hope it was right on the kisser!

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

:))))
thank you Al....i keep counting myself.

j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Nice thing about "First Round" is that it promises more.
Additional rounds with this caliber "fighter" can only make a guy better--or, at least, happier.
Unfortunately, before it's over, such a "cutie" usually finishes her opponent off.
As high-flying losers often like to say: What a way to go!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

your response is much better than the poem...thank you, Jimmy.

j.

[Papaya]

Well now I know how the expression drop dead gorgeous came to be. :)
It sounds like you fell hard in this fun and relatable poem.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Ana...

j.

[Adam Adams]

it's more than sensuality, perhaps, you ain't eve'n let it be shown off your words. simple. sweet. and very romantic (i may name it: lusty) write you've dripped down in very shorten words. the depth of your content speaking much 'bout the "heart-rate-beats" of love itself. nice imagery here.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

clever reply...thank you, Adams...

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Eyes meeting over spiked punch....brings back memories of high school dances. Such an innocent romantic write. I liked it. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Lydi...

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

Simple, but beautiful, and romantic, in a gut punch kind of way.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, KL.
j.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Round two always begins with being pinned to the ropes....it's the torture of the game :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, it is...thanks, Queenie...

j.

[WittyWonka]

A ko worth experiencing. There is nothing sweeter than love at first sight. Love the metaphor!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Witty.

j.

[Paul Bell]

Are you off the canvas yet, more to the point, did you get her number.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, doing the rope-a-dope....ha ha.

thanks, Paul...

j.

[Paul Bell]

Want reviews and updates.

[gabrielle]

Smiling here. This is cute, Jacob. This is the kind of knockout most of us would want to get :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you gabrielle...:)