the piercing quiet

the piercing quiet

 

 

fencing with commitment

the wound was slight,

but the poison ran deep

a slight touch to the heart

the blade unsure,

a cut like Hamlet's

no cure,

just a matter of time

until i fell to the tombs

listless

asking that you might have a good word for me

 

in future,

 

 

while all stood aghast,

watching my fervor for love

bleed out onto a floor

of insurrection

 

and as the distrusting Dane said,

"the rest is silence"

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

9/5/16

Reviews

[David Scott]

There are no new stories to tell it seems. Just new players on renovated stages...
Your talent is one thing a reader can count on.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, David.
j.

[ms. barrie]

i really love this...the spell-binding imagery...your word-weaving...depicting of dark passions...brutal betrayal, a sort of re'telling of Shakespeare's "hamlet" ...is just splendid...and is testimony of your poetic gifts. i love the
ending...was just the icing on this delicious cake. thank you for sharing...X

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, barrie.
j

[RomaJ]

Our passions drive us. Whether it's love, hate, revenge, or something as simple, as just getting out of bed.
We are driven. At times, blindly. But it's that drive, that gives us the will to live. Inspires us. Inspires others. Without which, most likely we'd still be lying in bed, listless. I would think that "silence" is finally finding the kind of peace, we all seek.

Especially after everything...

I haven't read Hamlet in years, I'd love to read it again. Excellent piece.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Roma..
j.

[Paul Bell]

It's Sunday morning and i'm suffering from forced alcohol syndrome. Feeling the madness of Ophelia here, or the madness of my hangover. Either way, a knife to the heart is probably the cure.Always think present day relationships mirror Shakespeare's plays. Always tragedy lurking around. Great write as ever jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like your reply better than the poem, Paul...

thank you

j.

[Drcicarlo]

This is so fascinating! Incorporating the Shakespearean concept into this lovely piece is magnificent. His tragedies were always my favorite topics to discuss in British Literature. In my opinion, this is simply amazing. Well done my friend!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Erica...yes, i am such a fan of his...my two favorites are Romeo and juliet and Hamlet...i used to teach both...

j.

[Drcicarlo]

Wow! I can't stress how important it is to learn early modern English. The influence of our words. I remember my introduction to the literary genius-- I had 5 years of great teaching.

[Einstein Noodle]

i enjoyed watching the fencing in the Olympics just past .. it is so noble and quick .. one can hardly see the points made .. tragedy of tragedies ..all die ... "the rest is silence" if its only earth and bones ;) your showing some of your roots in this one i wager ... reading the language of Shakespeare is not easy but so worthwhile .. you give us a quick modern version that hits the nitty gritty of it all ..
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, E.
j.

[1VJ]

Very modern Shakespearean tilt. A noble heart still bleeds.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Paloma.
j.

[Corset]

Did you get slapped by a white glove sir? You've out done yourself!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

geez, maybe so...thank you, Corset...

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

Someone is on a roll and it isn't me. You have more poetry in you than Carter has liver pills.

WOW!

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

he does have a bad liver, doesn't he?!
thanks for the kind words.....

j.

[Bacchus]

like Hamlets... no cure
But maybe perchance
"to sleep, perchance to dream..."
thank you for including us in all your dreams
fulfilled or the ones that long to be.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words,

j.