a gardener's motif

a gardener's motif

 

 

there is a trace of you

in a bed of roses,

a whiff of wanting

to pick your innocence

and press it into a book of everlasting love

 

there is a trace of you

but that garden has no pillows

and only the imprint of your heart

 

is what i have left

to rest my head upon

when the moon's thorns

remind me.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/28/16

Reviews

[Carolynn]

What a beatiful memory you have so elegantly described - even amongst the thorns :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Carolynn,

j.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jacob, a breath-taking romantic poem...
a garden where seeds were planted by the
light of the moon... Memories of roses on
pillows by weeping willows. truly lovely, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Pat,

j.

[Patricia Wedel]

"That garden has no pillows and only the imprint of her heart" ...
only a trace of her love... melancholy Motif... truly, Pat
p.s. I must have had too much dandelion wine...
when I left my first comment...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ah but yes, there is a trace of romantic here..what once was...you were not off the mark at all---read moreah but yes, there is a trace of romantic here..what once was...you were not off the mark at all---

but enjoy the dandelion!

[gabrielle]

How lonely it is when all we have are memories.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, gabrielle,
j.

[andrew mitchell]

every rose has its thorn jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew.

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

A poignant beauty of a poem. Memories......we think the sweetness will last forever, but even pressed roses dry and become brittle. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that is true, Lydi...

thank you,

j.

[JayceeC]

Ah the potpourri of memories, marred by the thorns of regrets. This dream haunting scene is lively yet sad. The garden in nightscape is full of shadows.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Jaycee...

j.

[Kelly Scheppers]

Your poetry is just the best, Jacob! I am reminded of the warmest of memories with this.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Kelly...

j.

[W.k.kortas]

Well, you can't trust roses much now, can you?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

not too much...thanks W.k.

j.

[Paul Bell]

That was a journey of love, till i got to the stinging last line. Powerful.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Paul...

j.

[Leslie Philibert]

Like this a lot. It has for me, a kind of Shakespearian feeling, a kind of imagery you would find in a sonnet, but transposed into an open verse form. Great write, so all WC writers should have a look at this,

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Leslie.
j.