a gardener's motif
A Poem by
jacob erin-cilberto
a gardener's motif
there
is a trace of you
in a bed of roses,
a whiff of wanting
to pick your innocence
and press it into a book
of everlasting love
there is a trace of you
but that garden has no
pillows
and only the imprint of
your heart
is what i have left
to rest my head upon
when the moon's thorns
remind me.
erin-cilberto
8/28/16
© 2016 jacob erin-cilberto
Reviews
Life without love means there's nothing truly worth dying for. A source of blessed happiness. Journeys have an irreplaceable value when they are traveled with someone special. This piece is sentimental and heart touching. Every single word with its own beautiful meaning collides with such an overwhelmingly rich tone. Great job Jacob!
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
thank you for your words, Erica.
j.
Love this . . . love roses . . . & I very much feel the "book press" purpose, along with the "moon's thorns" . . . nice word blend of gardening & longing.
Posted 8 Years Ago
Love this . . . love roses . . . & I very much feel the "book press" purpose, along with the "moon's thorns" . . . nice word blend of gardening & longing.
8 Years Ago
thank you, barleygirl...
j.
"your heart
is what I have left
to rest my head upon
when the moon's thorns
remind me"/
which is a rather baroque, Victorian way of saying
something liable when one is in position to
incur:
"yet oft his heart, divine of something ill
misgave him; he the faltering measure felt" John Milton wrote in "Paradise Lost" in 1694.
Both you and John's hearts are entwined........great poem....dana
Posted 8 Years Ago
"your heart
is what I have left
to rest my head upon
when the moon's thorns
remind me"/
which is a rather baroque, Victorian way of saying
something liable when one is in position to
incur:
"yet oft his heart, divine of something ill
misgave him; he the faltering measure felt" John Milton wrote in "Paradise Lost" in 1694.
Both you and John's hearts are entwined........great poem....dana
8 Years Ago
thank you for your kind words, dana.
j.
Very beautiful. A very nice read :)
Posted 8 Years Ago
Very beautiful. A very nice read :)
8 Years Ago
thank you, Dave.
j.
Perhaps we simply reap as we sow; though that is of course a far too simplistic an observation for such a complex thing as love.
These are beautifully wrought lines jacob.
Beccy
Posted 8 Years Ago
Perhaps we simply reap as we sow; though that is of course a far too simplistic an observation for such a complex thing as love.
These are beautifully wrought lines jacob.
Beccy
8 Years Ago
thank you, Beccy...
j.
Poems of regret, of loss, are the hardest to read, and not exactly the easiest to write. They touch a chord and resound within most of us too closely for our own liking. A good write, Jacob.
Posted 8 Years Ago
Poems of regret, of loss, are the hardest to read, and not exactly the easiest to write. They touch a chord and resound within most of us too closely for our own liking. A good write, Jacob.
8 Years Ago
thank you for your words, Ted.
j.
very beautiful words , Jacob
Posted 8 Years Ago
very beautiful words , Jacob
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
thank you, Corset.
j.
Such a lovely poem. Very sad that innocence was plucked and only an imprint of a heart remains.
Love... Lost and empty.
Posted 8 Years Ago
Such a lovely poem. Very sad that innocence was plucked and only an imprint of a heart remains.
Love... Lost and empty.
8 Years Ago
thank you, Ana.
j.
Another beautiful one. There are those who want a love that in the end is not realistic, and because of that they can leave the real thing behind.
Posted 8 Years Ago
Another beautiful one. There are those who want a love that in the end is not realistic, and because of that they can leave the real thing behind.
8 Years Ago
thank you for your kind words, KL.
j.
It is art night when the memories hurt the most when our minds start to relax and our past starts to seem in. Very nice jacob. I enjoyed it a lot.
Posted 8 Years Ago
It is art night when the memories hurt the most when our minds start to relax and our past starts to seem in. Very nice jacob. I enjoyed it a lot.
8 Years Ago
your reply is thoughtful and poetic...thank you, James.
j.
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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at a community college and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. I am here to read for inspiration from other po..
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