shaken gladly

shaken gladly

 

 

a loose olive

freed from its martini life

the pit just a gnarled past

the gin, a softly pounding residue

of yesterday's overindulgence of you

 

a wet coaster,

an ice cubed tear

and i am stirred at the thought

 

we once drank love from the same

short glass

 

now just sipping away,

i see that olive slip further from 

view,

and bend a smile its way.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/10/16

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

There is, in a lot of relationships, not all, an ability to get past the bitter and find a smile in the memories. This is a wonderful representation of that, in your own poetic style.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, KL...

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

GREAT metaphor....Beefeater's with either an olive or a twist of lime. Long ago and far away. A frozen tear.....and the longer ago the memory is, the less likely the tears are to flow. At some point, we can smile at the memories. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i find several to smile at...thank you, my friend.

j.

[Brianna Brie]

a wet coaster,
an ice cubed tear
and i am stirred at the thought

I love the image of an ice cubed tear and your title is perfect. This leaves me feeling sad even though the olive smiles.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Brianna...

j.

[W.k.kortas]

"we once drank love from the same/short glass"; now that is some phrasing worthy of a very dirty martini indeed.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, W.k.

taking a break for awhile...stay well.

j.

[Rita L. Sev]

Even those short shots are worth putting on the tab...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, they are...thank you, Rita...

j.

[aLittlePain]

As smooth as the content! And a lovely metaphor, lovely piece Jacob. Rach x

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Rach.

j.

[andrew mitchell]

How special moments become distant. a softly pounding residue of over indulgence maybe a headache maybe the heart having goosebumps.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, andrew...

j.

[Baby Ricochet]

This is kinda sad. Melancholic like.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Mark....

j.

[Ted Kniffen]

I like this, j. A lovely poem of reminiscence and a nod to a past love with a smile bent its way. Well done. Good write.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Ted.

j.

[Kirsty Woodward]

Amazing! No words. This is my first piece of poetry I've really read in a while and I felt every bit of it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Kirsty,

j.