of Course

of Course

 

 

celebrate the fine print

those words barely legible

or audible

 

the catch under the hook

the one that leaves the ears bleeding

caption cacophony

 

the noise of you leaving

deafening silence

the commercials never indicated

outcome

 

that fine print is not so fine

when reality strikes,

we are enticed to another

 

the deal is made

no returns

just a broken heart

 

and no recourse.  

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/4/16

Reviews

[KBW]

I had to read this twice because it was so inteiguing. I really wanted the words to sink and I just want to say beautifully written.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, KBW---

j.

[KBW]

My pleasure

[Alfred Kukitz]

Oh the lack of a pre nup in love's finest hour.

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Al...:))

[Miss Sharon]

That particular "deafening silence"...that of unrequited love, is the loudest of all. You've captured it beautifully Jacob. ~Sharon

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Sharon.

j.

[Ted Kniffen]

The thing of it is, even in the failure of the relationship we search out a new contract and disregard the fine print. Good poem.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insight, Ted.

j.

[Deuces]

Life has its illegible disclaimers we only notice when the damage is done. It is wise to take heed.

Awesome.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Cyntax.
j.

[Pryde Foltz]

You can't return what is broken ... you fix it or leave it in shatters ... but it stays yours. Another fine work in metaphor:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Pryde.

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

When the silence is deafening.....I think we all have had times like this. A done deal....no deposit, no return. The finality hurts. Of course? No, not all relationships take this course. Great alliteration and metaphors in this one. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Lydi.

j.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

If I could ...I would turn back the page. Look longer at the penmanship. Breathe deeper the meaning behind each phrase. I would pick out my favorites and pen them to my heart. My memories can't recall feelings. My mind lies......

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like your reply...it is better than the poem itself...

so poetic, you are.

j.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Nah, it's just your wonderful writing!

[barleygirl]

As always, excellent word crafting & singing alliteration: "caption cacophony" . . . "fine print not so fine" . . . and I like the way the opening is "of course" and the closing is "no recourse" (nice juxtaposition).

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, barleygirl.

j.

[Baby Ricochet]

This is a really good poem. Good metaphor & innuendo. You excel at that kind of thing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Mark.

j.