the form of the storm

the form of the storm

a glutton for lightning

electric thought patterns

eloquent shocks to the synapse

knowledge is a storm

some absorb, live through it

and shine afterwards like an alternate sun

new ideas become the rainbow

and before they disappear

we take selfies of our discoveries

to prove eccentricities

are merited

the survivors always come out the other end

of the twister

a bit bent

but with newfound logic

and understanding of the beast...

erin-cilberto

8/1/16

Reviews

[Marianne Rose]

I love this one- a fan of brainstorming - my husband hates that word - I am defintely a glutton for gathering a bunch of lightning rods in a room and challenging the thunder gods to knock our socks off. I don't know if I like knowledge as much as I do just raw ideas that haven't become knowledge yet. Knowledge feels too serious for my taste- cuz when I got a masters everyone treated me like I was knowledgable because I absorbed other people's theories. Okay, maybe it's a little self-absorbed like selfies are- glorying in the synergy of eccentric souls - but I don't care- it's fun! As fun as driving through a lightning storm with a twister forming far enough away to be exciting without being dangerous. Yes to being bent! We're all too damned straight in this society- we need a little bent logic for a change. Okay, my ramble is over- I really liked this one a lot- thanks.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like the raw ideas, myself...try to teach my students to think way outside the box...and yes, getting that masters based on others' knowledge...research...ugh...

love your idea of bent logic....i like your reply much better than the poem itself.

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

"new ideas become the rainbow"....love that line! We are so proud of our ideas....our inspirations. Life is a storm and getting anything accomplished in this crazy world can seem like trudging through molten lava. Still, it is all worth it if we learn from it. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, it is definitely worth it...thank you, Lydi..

j.

[Ken Simm.]

It is wonderful to see how you place thoughts so precisely in form and take us there. Where perhaps we have never been before.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Ken.

j.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

That is amazing. Opportunities are there at every step in our lives, it is us who must learn to make the best use of them. An opportunity missed and an opportunity taken advantage of shapes one's life differently, both of these will have different culminations. Life can be approximated to a battle. We have competition everywhere. Plus, if we sit idle then we can't achieve anything at all. This poem of yours is one of the best pieces I have ever read. Keep writing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, Vatsal.

j.

[Baby Ricochet]

Love the second stanza. Ideas can be anything from a spring shower to a tornado heading straight for a trailer park. Depends on how much trouble you could potentially get into if you act on it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Mark.

j.

[Corset]

brainstorming, ideas, conscious thought, poets are always chasing storms for new material, your sources seem much better than mine (sticks out tongue)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

sticks tongue out back...:)

thank you, Corset.

j.

[Ruth]

There is never a piece of writing from you Jacob that does not stir me somehow, to understand we have no choice but to evaluate and grow with that wisdom and we are seldom ever the same after that jolt, superb :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wisdom comes with age i suppose....we try to get smarter, anyway.

thank you, Poppy,read morewisdom comes with age i suppose....we try to get smarter, anyway.

thank you, Poppy,

j.

[Deuces]

You know I've always been a fan of your flawless use of metaphor and analogy. We all must live within the beast and only with knowledge does the travel sometimes seem easier. And yes, knowledge can be both good and bad and sometimes feel like lightning and thunder claps. Those selfies we take are the once in a lifetime imprints we leave on our journey.

This rings so true. Awesome.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love your insights, my friend...thank you for your words...

j.

[SJ Mullins]

I love this, Jacob. I have had so many storms in my life, but I've also seen a lot of rainbows after the storm. I've always loved them. I find solace in thunderstorms and love watching them as long as they are not too severe. I love the whole poem, but I especially love these lines, "the survivors always come out the other end
of the twister
a bit bent
but with newfound logic
and understanding of the beast..."

I understand, because I have lived it. Very profound write. Excellent job, my friend.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for relating and commenting how you relate...

j.

[SJ Mullins]

You're welcome. :)

[Lyn Anderson]

Sometimes learning is painful. We must endure the storms to enjoy the rainbow. Beautiful poem.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, KL...
j.