unemployed again

unemployed again

 

 

corporate smile

you eloquently encroach

 

this desk jockey juvenile

with your businesslike goodbye

 

i take my severance

clean out my heart's locker

 

and peddle my broken emotions

elsewhere,

 

willing to take less pay

if only

 

the benefits could improve

and there might be

 

slightly better opportunity

for ever after security.

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/30/16

Reviews

[Ruth]

The endings are never pretty to feel, sigh...you place me right in the emotion Jacob :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Poppy.
j.

[Baby Ricochet]

"Desk Jockey Juvenile." You kinda want to kill that little a*****e. Great line.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thanks, Mark...and thanks for the smile.

j.

[Brittany Bostic]

Writing about the truth of life is never one of my favorite things. Falling from the latter, having no work, that is a truly terrible part of life. You sum it up quite well.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Brittany...

j.

[Gray]

There's nothing worse than walking out the door wandering 'what now' and nothing comes into your head.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Grey.
j.

[Paul Bell]

Thankyou for your life service. Please take this clock as a token of your time spent with us. Wonder how many clocks are in the rivers heading out to sea. Great write.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thanks for your reply, Paul...it gave me a smile.
j.

[Bacchus]

this lady is costly...
and yet we can't not keep reading.
hoping for some return for you.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Bacchus...

j.

[Marianne Rose]

Great portrayal of the heartless system that does not honor attachments and loyalty, does not provide time to respond or even feel the sting, but instead discards people like they are broken or replaced pieces of machinery. i love the line "clean out my heart's locker and peddle my broken emotions elsewhere". Captures the contrast between an empty smile, businesslike, and a true goodbye, which would have heart and opportunities to express something. Fine poem.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Marianne...

j.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Been fired a couple times in my life... there is nothing more humiliating that that.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

especially when it comes to love, eh?

thanks, Dale.

j.

[mou]

you have written it by creating a organizational environment where every line is quite thought provoking in a multidimensional way..it is written with full of humor and it makes this write very different and
it pushes me to add it in my favorite list..
as always ,you again flow the readers with your write ,with the help of very few lines..
Just wonderful!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, mou...

j.

[barleygirl]

Many layoffs in this area in the past ten years . . . especially amongst older friends, some never get their feet on the ground again, so this is a familiar refrain. I can feel the bittersweet mix of disappointment & wistful hopefulness, which is so true-to-life, reflecting the ups & downs of life.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, barleygirl...

j.