the comfort of confinement

the comfort of confinement

 

 

 

always believed "less is more"

but the sentence with you

was much too short

you paroled me before i was capable

of fitting back into a society 

of possibility

 

unable to adapt,

i perpetrated a new love crime

just to get back to my cell

 

loved another just as fickle

stole her heart

through a cracked window of time

burgled her emotions

 

knowing she would steal them right back

arrest my mental agility

read me my writes

 

cuff me once again to my past

and put me in solitary

as a repeat offender

 

now here i sit

in a brevity of imagination

 

 

the key thrown away

for the life of my pen.

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/23/16

Reviews

[Bacchus]

who is this woman?

read me my writes.
i love that.

i'd even end it there. it's such a strong line.
... when are you starting up your online class again? ;)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Bacchus...:))

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

The worst, and best, relationships, come after a bad one -- and by the time you figure out which one that is, it is usually too late to stop yourself anyway. Well done.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and then we do the time for the crime of naivety...

thank you, KL.

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

A rebound relationship only compounds the pain. Often you do unto others as has been done to you, but there is no pleasure in that. Still, broken relationships are easy fodder for poetry, no doubt about that. Your pen seems to have nine lives, my friend. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Lydi...

j.

[Beccy]

The Institutional syndrome writ large.
Sometimes there is more comfort, or perhaps a better word choice would be safety, in self containment.

Brilliant writing and effortless metaphoric skills jacob.

Beccy.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Beccy...

j.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

Comparisons always adorn a poem further. You always entangle the words and give out the message clearly. Very well-written. Keep writing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Vatsal.

j.

[Jon Roggie]

After momentary solitary confinement, I see a jailbreak in the future.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

could be...thanks Jon...

j.

[Papaya]

Killer closing lines! Love that.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Ana.

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

Are you in jail again? Listen I know a guard he will let me give you a new pen, I'll supply the paper. After our weekly visits I'll post them on WC.

KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK!

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thanks for the smile, as always, my friend...

j.

[Miss Sharon]

An awesome write as per your forte Jacob! I love your style. ~Sharon

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Sharon.

j.

[Miss Sharon]

You are quite welcome my fellow wordsmith and friend! ~SP

[Shannon]

I love how far you can stretch a metaphor without breaking it!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, S. Mi

j.