no reprisal from the ashes

no reprisal from the ashes

 

 

i wrote a first draft of a poem

but then shut the window

 

shivered one more time

then threw the pen

into the fire,

 

walked outside the cabin

trudged several feet through snow white pages

turned an eerie inkish blue,

watched my writing churn smoke from the chimney

 

then flew away

with the words under wing

looking forward to a different thing.

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/21/16

Reviews

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

You are truly one of the few (and I mean few) writers that I envy for your ability to paint your words into such striking images that I can't help but love the canvas you convey. It's just striking the way that you write.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, Linda Marie...

j.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

Oh, lovely. So picturesque. Happens with many, doesn't it? Good witty words used there. Keep writing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Vatsal.

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

I can identify! So often I start to write and by the time I am finished, I have gone off in a totally different direction. The wind brings words to us and then sweeps them away just as quickly. Great metaphor...which is not surprise from you! Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind words, Lydi.

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

bravo sir!! bravo .. its like yes!! fly away fly away .. rest on new boughs of pine or even vinegar ;) well said says i!! enjoyed the experience ..don't we just all love to write :)))
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, we do, E....we love it.

thank you,

j.

[Bacchus]

oh I like how this is about a draft coming in... but you never say draft.
A blowing draft of a writing draft... too cool. Very, very clever.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you so much, Bacchus, for your words...

j.

[V]

The difficult and exhausting writing process. I like your metaphors very much. The rhyming ending added to a feeling of final release.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Vanessa...

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

I'd like to come along. I'll bring my wings! Wanna go to Mount Poem, catch the grandeur?

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Mount Poem? i'm in...

thanks Al...

j.

[Alisa Js]

Love the imagery in this well written piece...

Full of emotional punch.

Alisa

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Alisa

j.