tone deaf

tone deaf

 

 

harmony insinuates contentment

and yet, voices blend just as well in resentment

when the chorus condemns love's lean investment

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/20/16

Reviews

[Kelly Scheppers]

You will forever be one of the finest poets here! Much applause and admiration, Jacob!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are very kind, Kelly.
thank you for your words,

j.

[Michael (Letters and Li..]

Jacob... Just a perfect little piece. It's so blunt but has so much depth. Masterful, my friend.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Michael...

j.

[V]

I read a hurting bluntness into it. The lay out and the style, it's shortness reminds me of my writings in a way. Creatively and originally crafted.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Vanessa...

j.

[Sami Khalil]

I think this describes the political mood in America and the election cycle. Wow. Powerful...:)....................

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, Sami.

j.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome. ...:))))

[Nisreen]

Very witty
I like The way this thought presists
Of pure déafeness
The poem reads to a deaf tone within itself

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Curiosity.

j.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

Rhyme works pretty well and enhances the beauty of the already beautiful poem. Use of alliteration adorns the piece further. Well-penned piece of poetry. Keep writing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Vatsal.

j.

[redzone]

if I were you Jacob, I would stay away from KL's church and choir... lol.. couldn't resist a bit of tease... but after listening to all the convention talk and praise for a fascist, I too thought along the lines of KL as I read your small but poignant poem...

I might only add a question, what actually is meant by resentment/love?? could be both are not worth a rats a*s and neither should be striven for...

redzone

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words and the smile, Curt...need more of that these days.

j.

[Bacchus]

contentment vs resentment
interesting word play there...
oh when bitterness sounds so sweet.
hard day for me here-
and what tune do I choose to take...
may sound the same to everyone else but my heart knows the motive behind the song.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Bacchus...

very poetic reply...

[Lyn Anderson]

Very few words that speak volumes. Nicely done. My take on this is political -- we can sound like we are all happy and singing to the same tune if we are all ticked off -- the problem is, it's that kind of tone deaf that led to the rise of Hitler. Or maybe you just heard the choir at my church. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i stood outside your church, listening...pondering...

i like your smart reference to Hitler...yes tone deaf people followed...and it all sounded so good.

j.