to the core of what eats us

to the core of what eats us

 

 

blue birds, blue jays and blue bloods

Baltimore Bullets

red stained streets

red stained hearts

crimson tears bleed for families

the protectors need protecting

 

a spray of delusion

armed enforcer of retribution

looking through the site of a gun

eliminates lives for revenge or fun

 

but the fingers on the trigger shake with certainty

bombs bursting within the air of sanity

 

we are all cracked,

fallen from the nests

without learning to fly above the hated worm

food for anger

 

crawls into our souls

and destroys the apple from within.

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/15/16

Reviews

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

You have pictured- what is the most fierce challenge the world faces today- in a heart-touching manner. Sometimes I ponder that how can some people take a gun in their hand and empty its magazine on their fellow humans. Terrorist organizations- like the Islamic State- mislead people by saying that by killing non-Muslims, you can make God happy, you can please him. Actually, those who kill people on the name of religion must be told that all religions are equal and teach the same thing- love for fellow humans, and respect for their respective religions.
Hatred has no medicine. It actually eats one from within, and this is what the leaders of terrorist organizations induct in their recruits- they are destroyed from within and consequently, are left with no humanity.
Your poem is just superb. Keep writing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, religions mostly do teach love...or are supposed to...to use that as a reason for violence is just crazy...

thank you, Vatsal.

j.

[Papaya]

So wonderfully worded last sentence. That thing, evil or poison, eats away at us from within.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Ana...

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

i was watching a series on gangs in the USA ...the two they were looking into were in Texas ...two very violent gangs fighting over drug control ... some ex and some active gang members from both "parties" agreed to be interviewed ... i was stunned (tho i shouldn't be) be the cavalier attitude they had about killing anyone who was in their way ... anyone! both sides talked about the culture of hate they revered towards each other .. if a member of one gang ran into one from the other "side" they had to "get into it" ... "take care of business" .. they looked like they were in their 20's ... such tragedy ... very graphic closing sir ... its all insanity :(
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, you said it, E....the cavalier attitude about killing...and that is what is so scary.
read moreyes, you said it, E....the cavalier attitude about killing...and that is what is so scary.

thank you for sharing this...

j.

[SJ Mullins]

Wow, this is a brilliant write, Jacob. I absolutely love it. It is a sad day in our country when the protectors need protecting. I especially love the last six lines. Life does have a tendency to crack all of us in one way or another. The last two lines say it all. I find this to be a very poignant poem. Well done. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, Suzanna...
j.

[SJ Mullins]

My pleasure. :)

[Autonomous]

I have to say this poem is indescribable to me, it has a certain air to it that makes it really compelling and it draws you in masterfully. It was just great!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Zwsed.

j.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

What a hard hitting poem... yes the red white and blue seems to be mostly red cause of all this hatred that seems to plague humantiy.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, it does, Dale....yes it does...

thank you,

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

"eliminates lives for revenge or fun"....a tragic commentary on the events of the past few weeks. Right now, a prisoner has escaped from the courthouse in Broward County....where I live. There has been a three hour search already. People tend to help the criminals and sympathize with them. The apple is rotten....and I fear it is more than one in the bushel. Excellent metaphor. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, yes, pretty bad scenario when people are helping the criminals...but often lately we sympathize with them...and yet, there are more good cops than bad...and the good ones seem to be paying for what the few bad do...so sad

thank you for your words Lydi..

j.

[V]

A poetic truth, I can abs relate to your well-chosen words. I also like the colors you added to your writing and the metaphors, they read fabulous. Another fav for me by you, I think. The last two stanzas read so well, something you feel like reading several times.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, my friend....

j.