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your voice trailed off

like letters disappearing 

from a printer low on ink

 

promises made with wispy intent,

but days pass

each a copy of another

 

fading into an essay

no longer legible

to the naked eye of us...

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/10/16

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I know the feeling . . . everything my life used to be ten years ago has faded like a print-out from an empty ink cartridge (amazing imagery!) Some days I feel like I'm just writing to distract myself awhile longer, until I can finally be excused from this difficult exercise in humility. I wish I could say things will get better, but I'm lacking in hopefulness right now. The only truthful thing I can say is that many of us tender hearts are feeling this way lately (((HUGS)))

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for sharing and understanding, barleygirl

j.

[Karen]

There is sadness in this poem, sheltered in the images to which most writers can relate (great images!). Beautiful, as is always expected from your poetry.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Karen.

j.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

I like how the imagery is simple enough to understand this poem's message on growing apart.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Sprint.

j.

[Ananya]

Beautifully written. Short and exact. I love the economy of words in your writing. You do not waste a single word. Each one meaningful and necessary.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Ananya...

j.

[Marcus Sergiu David]

Wonderful use of language and beautiful analogy. Loved every line :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Marcus...

j.

[SJ Mullins]

You write so eloquently, Jacob, and with such feeling. I always enjoy reading your poetry. Thank you for sharing your wonderful gift with us. I have been in this spot more times than I care to remember and it is not a fun place to be.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for reading me...and for the kind words, Suzanna...

i get much inspiration from reading the poets here.

j.

[SJ Mullins]

There are some very good ones (like yourself). :)

[Shabeeh Haider]

did the voice really trail off or were we so far away that we could not hear the hidden meanings?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

probably too far away....thank you for your visit and your words, Shabeeh.

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

The words blur as the love that was printed there dies on the page.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

your response is a poem in itself...

thank you, KL...

j.

[Papaya]

I think we often start off with clear and ambitious intentions that fade then over time.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, i think we do...thank you, Ana...

j.

[Pryde Foltz]

Kind of good thing when that happens. Out with old, gives better focus to the new. Supremely good writing, here:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Pryde

j.