Do not Disturb

 

Do not Disturb

 

 

 

sensibility checked out of the motel
reason became a vacancy sign

and love left without paying its bill,
now the neon light flickers with rage

and old age,
a bunch of rooms with empty beds
no one sleeps together in harmony
anymore

they stand at attention
with threats as bedfellows
munching midnight snacks

staring at the closet door
listening for monsters
praying,

the cleaning service quit years ago
the manager threw up his arms in surrender
and moved to a new country

but the lights keep flickering
enticing hearts to stop for comfort
and empty the closets of old woes
and restlessness

put sheets of poetry on the beds
let minds roll over in peace,
and maybe pay for another night 

just to feel safe for a page or two.

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/7/16

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

I just kept thinking safety in familiarity. Better the devil you know. Thought provoking pen Jacob

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your review, Chris.
j.

[steppenwolf]

I don't know what to say exactly but I do like, as I've mentioned before, your crossing the line between nouns and verbs, i.e., love left without paying its bill. Lots of great images--the cleaning service left years ago, put sheets of poems on the bed.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Leslie.
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

this is kind of a wicked weaving of very real old age stuff and conditions of the nation ... as well as an appropriate opiate for any and all involved ... from relatives of the aged to poets to worn out to feel the streets ... thank you for a very stimulating read ..just another poem that i really like from your pages sir! :)
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, E.

your support is always encouraging...

read morethank you for your kind review, E.

your support is always encouraging...

j.

[Diamond]

Beautiful, how mind overtakes the heart?... sometimes. But where are we heading to with all the reason? Am sure it's obscure for everyone. But it is a fact to accept and work on. Thank you for sharing it. Oh, the first two lines play an important role.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Queen...

j.

[Cassie]

Jacob Jacob, over the years you continually amaze me with your poetry and to tell you the truth, one reason I haven't left Wc is you, your poetry which completely sweeps me off my feat, amazes me and of cos gets my muse back. I hope you are not planning to close account cos if you do, you will totally disappoint me. Well done well done sir.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Cassie, for your kind words....i am quite moved by what you said.

not planning on leaving...just been swamped lately with summer school classes....can't get here as often...

thank you again,

j.

[poetdoug]

" A bunch of room with empty beds, no one sleeps together anymore." Thanks for this marvelous and wise metaphor---After hearing Pres. Obama's Memorial speech today, all I can think about is that this poem sounds just like the HOTEL AMERICANA(:) Thanks for this excellent write.
A forever friend,
Doug

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind words, Doug...
j.

[poetdoug]

Heartfelt for sure.

[Onyia-Ali, Kingsley Chu..]

I really appreciates the way you used metaphor and personification here. Your laguage is quite superb. Well done, sir.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Onyia-ota,

j.

[Onyia-Ali, Kingsley Chukwuebuka Benson]

You're welcome, sir!

[V]

Your poem takes me on a nice, imaginative journey, it is studded with picturesque expressions, I especially like the last stanza. A smooth and vivid write.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Vanessa...

j.

[Monica Chen]

I always feel like motels are some sort of icon of romantic angst and the approach this poem took to describing emotional (maybe even physical?) tension in relation to a motel was really captivating and emphatic.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Monica...

j.

[andrew mitchell]

as long as it isn't bates motel, the emptiness of the motel, the flickering of the neon light, the desolate eeriness suggested this motel is haunted lol.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew...

j.