Dreamy Precipitation

Dreamy Precipitation 

dreary tears just keep falling

pounding the roof of my heart

flooding my path to blue sky wines

to savor the flavor of you,

my door is open

but you won't take shelter...

i could catch your clouds 

and wring them dry

but your eyes latch onto a different climate

and i continue in the shadow of your mist

with my missed intentions

trying to find a heavier raincoat

one that might absorb more disappointment

until your rain subsides

and your heart emerges 

from its shelter

finally seeing me

standing before you

clutching a sun meant

for us to share.

erin-cilberto

7/4/16

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

People who are depressed seldom see the light at the end of the tunnel....even that light includes a loving hug and understanding ear. Being a good friend is important, but everyone has a saturation level. Sometimes the "blue sky wines" are ones the person drowns in. Good one, Jacob. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Lydi.

j.

[Jon Roggie]

You were born in the wrong time my friend. I can see you writing away about four centuries ago, most likely in Italy. Another beautiful, and touching poem.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i sometimes feel four centuries old...:)))
thank you for your words, Jon.

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

When both parties have been hurt, and one wants to give shelter, but the other is too afraid to join -- love after love, and different than the one before.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so true, KL...

thank you!

j.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

This is so heart-touching. Lovely metaphors and witty use of words. The ending is pretty soothing and pleasing. "I could catch your clouds"- I liked this line the most for its wit, comparison and alliteration. A very good poem. Keep writing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Vatsal.

j.

[SJ Mullins]

Lovely write, Jacob. Beautifully written.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Suzanna...

j.

[SJ Mullins]

You are most welcome. :)

[DECIVIL]

The first side of my interest comes from the title of the poem itself 'dreamy precipitation'. That sounds more like a lover that is after one who doesn't know how much love the lover has for him or her. Your lines portrays that sense of love that leaves both in a different world awaiting a reconciliation of their love. A brilliant one that is.