An interesting premise contained in so few words, I respect the idea even if I don't share the conclusion. I admire those whom handle well the limitations of this poetic form, this rare skill is well displayed here.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
thank you for your kind and honest review, ranscan--
it's a broke a*s senryu Jacob... lol well as most art and artists, we are broke until we die even though we have given our hearts... another wonderful poetic expression Jacob...
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Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
can't take it with you, they say....but the voice dies when we do...and hopefully the sound of it wi.. read morecan't take it with you, they say....but the voice dies when we do...and hopefully the sound of it will live on through our poetry..
I think, though, even when a heart has given all it can, it suddenly finds more to give. You have packed a lot of meaning into three lines here, Jacob. Lydi**
Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at a community college and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. I am here to read for inspiration from other po.. more..