too soon, too late

too soon, too late

 

 

wobbly knees

beneath the shaded trees

the old ivory moon, not all that's intoxicating

 

a new sun will burn memories

of your beauty into my mind

my lips seared by the smile of your kiss

 

i will limp home to my own heart

years later,

still feeling the pinched nerve of you

 

making it hard to turn reflections

the other way,

as trafficked thoughts make my

love for you 

still a busy intersection

of past and present.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

6/25/16

Reviews

[V]

Love this one, it reads awesome. Perfect choice of words. I don't find much to say when I'm in awe. Such a good writing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are very kind, Vanessa.

j.

[Carolynn]

You must have had one absolutely fantastic woman in your life back then - she seems imbedded in many of your poems :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Carolynn---she was, and is imbedded....i think most of our writes of past will be a combination of influences...but she is probably the strongest.

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

At the corner of the past and present.....the images are a bit blurry, are they not? "The smile of your kiss".....what a lovely concept this is. A very romantic, albeit bittersweet, write. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Lydi...

j.

[Papaya]

a new sun will burn memories
of your beauty into my mind
my lips seared by the smile of your kiss

Jacob, you really need to write more love poems.
Those lines are superb.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Ana....

sometimes those love poems do come...but the muse is in charge...

appreciate your visit.

j.

[barleygirl]

I love the title & other instances of contrast thru-out your message. Life can be so contrary, I love it when a poet like you captures this back-and-forth sensation of moving thru our life experiences. I especially love this line: "still feeling the pinched nerve of you."

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, barleygirl

j.

[RedHairedWarrior]

Great imagery. It definitely highlights the "journey" aspect of love.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Katherine.

j.

[H.L. Cerveise]

I again see myself thinking so much about the present and past of good and bad relationships when I read your writings. I saw myself in my car driving from a tryst and every moment in my life involving others pushing through the intersection of my mind and heart. You have a great ability at getting the reader to feel your poetry at a deep level.

Well done.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, H.L.

j

[Corset]

driving on home after a long and perilous journey

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Corset.

j.

[Corset]

you're welcome J.

[Lyn Anderson]

There are wrong people we meet at times that turn out to be wrong, and wrong times for the right people. Life is fickle, and plays all sorts of tricks on us -- leading us to wonder where our hearts got so messed up.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are so insightful, my friend...thank you.

j.

[Marianne Rose]

I love the phrases "limped home to my own heart", the trafficked thoughts, wobbly knees, all poetic and interesting ways to capture this experience of love. The flow is beautiful and simple yet says so much. It feels innocent and aged at the same time. Thank you for sharing this.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Marianne...

j.