look close enough, you can see Mona Lisa's wearing braces

look close enough, you can see Mona Lisa's wearing braces

 

 

 

pitiful rendering

a painting of a sorrow

that is not real

 

foolish artist stole an idea

then brushed the real sentiment

with robotic strokes

 

the object on the canvass of ink

stares flawlessly back from the page

but something is missing in the eyes

 

 

erin-cilberto

6/25/16

Reviews

[softlyfall]

But Jacob, when you consider the gestalt and whole realness...isn't it expressive of something very real when reality is made empty?
Sometimes, when we turn the rock over we have to wonder- who did that before us and when and...and then the question looms... what is/was the beginning/end/top/bottom?
Can we ever assume a beginning or an end?
Oh and, I love how your poetry invigorates my curious mind.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

very insightful review, as always...appreciate your visits, Amy.

j.

[H.L. Cerveise]

I love this poem. The past is never as we think it is. We cannot see the spark of life in a painting or a picture. It is something that can only be seen in the present and when we look long and hard into that person's eyes.

Well done.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

such keen insight...thank you, H.L.

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

An interesting take on a famous smile. For me, it says that what the world sees in some of the most loved and revered and famous things is not real.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

very true, thank you, KL.

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

I saw her but not close up like the others. She occupied the same room as The Oath of Horatti which I used in a poem. Ana showed some real brillance's in her review. Nice work!

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Al...and yes, on Ana's review...she has such insight.
j.

[Papaya]

Ha! Hmm, I hadn't thought of that.
There was an impedimen, she would not have smiled with those things, can you blame her.
A picture is worth a thousand words but context is worth its weight in gold.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so true...thank you, Ana, for your visit...

j.

[andrew mitchell]

Her eyes are definitely soul less. The suggestion of Braces is very funny. I often wondered why Mona, surely there were more beautiful subjects.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

or maybe she was beautiful, and he wasn't very good at painting people? :)))

thank you, andrew

[Lydia Shutter]

And it's all in the eyes....if the smile does not reach the eyes, it is not genuine. Now you KNOW the next time I see a rendering of the Mona Lisa, I will be looking for braces. You have a great sense of humor and wit, my friend. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

have to have a strong sense of humor...it has gotten me through many hard times, with a smile---life is too short to be too serious.

thank you, lydi...

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

I absolutely agree, my friend. My sense of humor has gotten me through the tough times.

[icelandicblue]

I've never thought of her eyes as soulless, but perhaps that is why they follow you. Even a painting can be looking for something more. Art of any kind must come from the soul, that is what breathes life into one's work. I will have to go back to Paris (any excuse will do) and study her again. I shall send your regards.
: )

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Anne....:)

those memories with those eyes.

j.

[V]

The title made me smirk a little. I like the content a lot. When art is not done by the heart and soul, it turns out to be an emotionless and random piece barely reflecting true beauty, only a notion of it...It's all in the eyes, isn't it, even in pictures, if someone cannot catch their expression, all loveliness is destroyed by a lifeless and empty stare.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Vanessa.

j.

[V]

You're welcome.

[redzone]

oh man, another illusion bites the dust... soulless eyes and braces, no wonder she wasn't smiling... and of course there is no reason for us to smile at people/artists who just go through the motions and never take the time to know and understand anything... especially life... I enjoyed your poem and where it took me (at least) Jacob...

redzone

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, sharing where this took you, Curt.

j.