Strewn Longings

Strewn Longings



Orlando bloomed,
not acting, true mating, feeling in sync
with the music,
they danced in their own fashion
to their own tunes,

happy holsters carrying love
not guns,
blistering heat,
engaged fire
the passion of the prodigal suns

and then the bullets of deranged dismay
a supposed message contracting the turntable
to play massacred melodies
the red floor rising up to meet heaven

some notes escaped to the outside
but few could decipher the shots from song

most were too frightened to try---
Orlando bloomed,

dead flowers upon arrival
stems of systematic irreverence
for life,

now the aura is of muted
spirit,
as it rises above
the melee.


erin-cilberto
6/14/16

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Sad. ISIS claims credit and praises the actions of this murderer. He pledges allegiance to them and Obama goes on national television to tell the country this isn't related to ISIS or Islam. It isn't a "hate crime" nor an enforcement of Sharia dogma but a "criminal act" by a lone perpertrator. Meanwhile more Syrian Islamic "refugees" are being quietly smuggled into the USA by the acting government. Since 1984 over 5000 deaths and over 10,000 injured in the name of Islam but we are being told the religion is NOT the problem. But the people committing the acts certainly seem to believe in their "cause"...believe in it so much they are willing to die for it. I wonder where they get that idea...oh maybe, just maybe, from their religion?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, Fabian...it is horrific that these people commit these acts in the name of some God?
read moreyes, Fabian...it is horrific that these people commit these acts in the name of some God?

no real God would want to have these actions done in his or her name...whether ISIS initiated the act or commends it...a very scary event happened in Orlando....and many others have and will happen unless something is done.

j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I liked the release from the Prime Minister of Israel on the shooting. He is a true leader.

[Corset]

No matter how many times the news pours over it I still can not understand how a person can be so hollow to harm so many , can't wrap my mind around it, you've written a beautiful tribute J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Corset...can't wrap my mind around it either...

j.

[Corset]

so very wrong these things that happen because of hate or fear.

[Lyn Anderson]

A tragedy of enormous proportions. I frequent clubs in any district I feel like. Now the attention here has focused on Pride parade and the Pride week celebrations -- security tightened, etc., as different stories about the assailant are coming to light. One thing is clear, assault rifles are a lot more efficient way to mass murder than many other means -- Canadians have a hard time with the whole firearms debate in general. A city of 4.5 million is sweating over 25 homicides in 6 months -- not that that's not awful for each individual victim, but statistically a lot safer than a lot of big American cities. I don't believe Americans are inherently more violent, I think they have better access to weapons and a culture that on many levels supports that.
I am sorry, I go on. wonderful poem.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

can't disagree with your response...it is too easy to get weapons that can produce so many deaths at once...and there is just too much hate---not sure what the answer is....because those who really want to do these things will find a way...

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

So many wonderful phrases in this tribute, Jacob.... "massacred melodies", "happy holsters", "passion of the prodigal suns"! Being a Floridian, you can only imagine the impact this had on our area. It is unimaginable that a person could walk into a nightclub and kill 49 people....simply unimaginable. The fact the FBI was "watching" him boggles the mind. When will we ban assault rifles? It is already too late. A very well written tribute to the dead.....such a tragedy. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i can imagine, Lydi...my friend Denise lives 15 minutes from Orlando...

she is trying to move from there...has been for some time...but is anywhere safe anymore?

not sure...but it is all so sad.
thank you for your response.

j.

[W.k.kortas]

The opening line is clever and poignant, and the piece loses no luster from there. You and the good rushin have combined to solemnize the event with grace, compassion, and skill.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, W.k.

j.

[Carolynn]

Such a terrible tragedy - when something like this happens the whole earth mourns. Beautiful tribute Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Carolynn...

j.

[sakshi arora]

This is so deep, it penetrated my heart . I loved the red floor line. May their souls rest in peace.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, i hope they find peace now...thank you, sakshi...

j.

[Papaya]

Awww Jacob, such a beautifully heartbreaking poem.
How can we solve the problems in this world? I wish I had the answers.
Let love be.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Ana.

j.